On Frog, by Stewart Flintonlaubakersmith:  Then ending is improved (in my opinion) now it makes more sense as to where the letter comes into play and what not. Al... » Read more...

On Hootenanny!, by K. McCrae:  This whole story amused me, while at the same time making me somehwhat sad, which is a pretty good thing considering it... » Read more...

On Waking Up Dead, by Phedre:     I am going to start by saying that I have yet to see an interesting story about a teenager. This type of ... » Read more...

On Unearthed, by Laurie Paulsen:  Very well done indeed, as the other critiques pointed out this is one hell of a piece. Good description and an interest... » Read more...

On Frog, by Stewart Flintonlaubakersmith:   Wow, talk about creepy, a frog king yuck! I really enjoyed the flow of the story, very old school horror, it s... » Read more...

On Designed Intelligence, by Stefan Kaiser: Ha ha, that was well written, it was actually fun to read, which is something critical for a short story. The rhythm is dead ... » Read more...

On Facsimile, by Natalie Addison:  Cool story even though it was a bit darker than I expected. Hmm, I wonder if such a special (top of his class)&nbs... » Read more...

On Automated Systems, Inc, by Laurie Paulsen: Interesting piece even if the main idea is a bit overused. However, what saves it for being just another computer becoming al... » Read more...

On Saturation Point, Chapter 1: The Pieces Fall Where They May, by Laurie Paulsen: Opening Comments Hello, i am relatively new to Scribophile but I am part of several other critique circles so hopefully I ca... » Read more...

On Prom Night, by Arianna Roberts: Opening Comments Hello, i am relatively new to Scribophile but I am part of several other critique circles so hopefully I ca... » Read more...