hi, allie--
i appreciate your suggestions so far on my "moving target" poem. thank you!
i look forward to any additional thoughts you might have--i'm open and happy to learn.

I wanted to say thank you for the suggestions on figuring out the flow! A friend who can hear will read it out loud for me.
And yayyy finally got the 2nd part of your critique!

Thank you!!!

Ooo.... I'll defintely check them out! Thanks!!!

Yes, I agree - the books are awesome! Jacqueline Carey is one heckuva novelist - she makes it look so easy!

Thank you very much for your kind words and useful critique. I look forward to reading some of your work as well.

Hey, I saw your question on Haunter in the Dork's profile, and I thought I'd answer for you.. yes, you can post whatever you like, prose or poetry. To make it easier on the reader (so you get more crits) it may help to break up long pieces of prose into several posts, but it's up to you!