Thanks Amy for critiquing my story on Delorme. I've had the flu and don't know whether I answered you or not! So sorry, if I'm repeating myself. Yes, I see the places I need to fix up, thanks to youReally appreciate it! Will return the favour shortly

Thank you for the critique i really appreciate your comments x

Thanks for stopping by and giving my wee bit of work a test read. I'm re-vamping the entire idea and will be republishing that first bit soon. Hope you will be back!

Thanks for the suggestion to read 'Eric" It was good fast read, I enjoyed it. I see what you meant. I found that there were similarities with ideas I had yet to write, so either that is good that I think like a successful writer, or it is bad that what I thought were my good ideas are already being used. So with that I am going to switch to a few of my backup secenarios. I like that his Devil is such an administrative nit pick. I will have to read more of the Discworld series.

Also, Chubbs and Lehman can change appearance. You will see them take on different looks depending on their assignments. I do need to work in the beginning their basic demon 'look' though.

Thanks very much for your crit. Grammer and punctuation are my weak points so I do know there is improvement needed there. I will read "ERIC" I have not done so so I will do my due diligence to remove or reduce parallels, thanks for the heads up. I do have some very different changes coming up that take Frank out of MSI so that should eliminate some of the issues. I have an altenate setting for Frank and MSI if I need to make a change.

Thanks so much for the critque. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. I might get one more chapter out, but then I will have to get back to my other novel before it grows stale on me. Thanks again and I look forward to reading your new work.

I saw that you liked Neil Gaiman - have you read Good Omens?

err I meant bang not band

Thank you for the card. I think you should leave the info about basil in the first chapter, you have to have something in there to entertain readers while you built toward the setup for the big band

A thought, about about Kitten, instead if honey, it could be take either way and still be a friendly term
*Cheers*