Thanks for taking the time to help with my word count on chapter 7 of changes. Taking some of the suggestions out will take away completely from my style of writing, however there are LOT of word -cut suggestions that will be a big help; so cheers.

Hi; thanks for the critique. I gather that you have a serious hatred for sentence fragments. It's okay; we all have our things. I appreciate your time and your comments; I'll probably incorporate some before sending it off in final form.

Thanks for your critique and comments on All Bricks Short. I notice you want me to cut out almost everything that gives this story a voice, it is really a narrative, like the author is speaking directly to you. I will consider this but, for me, the charm of the story is in the voice. For certain, some of your suggestions are absolutely right on and I will include those in the next draft. The rest, I will have to think long and hard on. I appreciate the time you took to write this detailed critique.Write on

Hey, Andrea
Thanks for adding me to your favourite's list.

Thank you for your helpful critique of "Changes" chapter 4. It's always good for me to get other opinion's and to see how often different critiquers pick up on the same things - so thanks for taking the time. I'm glad you enjoyed it. JAB

No problem keep posting. Sorry my critique morphed into symbols and stuff. Would you like me to go back and clear it up so it would be easier to understand? Just let me know.

Andrea- consider me deprived of another bias- my comments about romance had more to do with my sometimes narrow view than reality-- and thank you --the brownies were great

Thanks so much for reading my work. I was worried about all that background so I'm glad my instincts were right.
Thanks also for the details with commas and quotes not my strong suit.

Andrea no problem It was a pleasure to read your work You'll notice if you read my work that I'm the queen of the comma, and I may mess up the 'it' thing here and there :: wink ::

thank you very much for reading my work. Your comments were helpful.
Jegattack