Her Pretty New Shoes
poetry
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February 21, 6:38amWord Count:
447Last Edited:
April 28, 5:54amWork Description
This poem is about child slaves/forced labor. It is still very much live in the garment industry, and most industries that need poeple to put their products together in large quantities. Minimizing overhead and maximizing profits. These industries send out 'scouts' to the poorest of countries, every five years with a briefcase full of money. They first pay the local authorities, military, and then the parents. These parents, with as many as ten children can't refuse this 'charity' with all their mouths to feed. The 'scout' assures the parents that their child will receive the 'best' of care and get a proper education. He (the scout) also brings along presents for all the children, usually the products from which the company makes, (which makes them even more sadestic and evil).
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Glazing eyes and hungry cries will soon
say goodbye to their oldest child.
Alluring her with gifts and plastic
smiles.
Her family will now eat on the promises of lies.
Insanity spits in humanity’s eyes.
Filled with false hope for the sake of their child,
a nine year old girl ties her pretty new shoes,
then takes the hand of this devil in a suit.
Confused by the smile on his face, so absolute.
As they walk away into a world so vile and depraved.
She looks back at her mother, trying to remember her face.
This precious, once wild eyed child,
Finds herself in a world of pain, so defiled.
Killing that gentle soul, dealing with devil hands taking its
toll.
Molding her dreams of freedom, to cold derision.
Crying inside about her parents decision.
Wishing they would come, and take her home.
Feeling the cruel eyes burning through, all alone.
As she is forced to sewing a countless number of things.
Twenty hour days and two minute breaks,
Just enough time to breath in, and give those little hands a
shake.
As the ringing of the machines is all she now hears.
Sleeping in fear of devils on the prowl of her and her peers.
Safety not a word known by her any more,
Thinking to herself, "I don't want to live anymore."
The world wears the jeans, rings, belts and things,
she made countless times with her tiny little fingers.
Demanding race of nameless faces, hording her spirit,
Buying jeans for more then she'll ever see in her life.
Plastic smiles are as killing as a sharp edged knife.
No one at all, to hold her hand, to let her know,
she's still alive, she still matters the most.
Has humanity forgotten these children, who are ghosts.
Every year, lives are taken away and sold like a trophy.
You devils beware, you do not want to know me.
Gods of industry, you better pray you never see me.
I'll burn you alive at the stake of your sins.
Crush you like the viscous maggots you are.
Bury you alive in that hundred-thousand dollar car.
I'll free all the children taken as a slave.
I'll try to save them all, before I'm in the grave.
Take them all by the hand, let them
understand, they are not forgotten by me
Give them back their precious freedom.
I would, if I could, take them all back to their homes
Write each, and everyone of them a poem.
Make amends for the hurt they did to them.
All human beings are not that cruel and depraved.
Someone better do something now, they need to be saved.
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I start off by saying that poetry critiqueing is not one of my strong suits, however, I will relay to you some of my ideas.
Her family will now eat on the promises of lies.
The idea crossed my mind to change "eat" to "feed." I think using feed is a nice play on words to depict this animalistic behavior.
Also, I'm a little uncertain about your rhyme schemes. Some lines seem to follow a pattern some don't. Perhaps you intended it this way. I would also look at your line metering a little bit. I think for the style you wrote this poem in you need a little bit more form.
I think you could play with the words a lot in this poem.
It is a very powerful subject, and I think it's beautiful, in a
way, that you voiced it. Nice job. ![]()



Within the cruely that takes its place within the poem lies a loud and screeching cry for freedom.
#1 Quote you did:
Insanity spits in humanity’s eyes.
Filled with false hope for the sake of their child,
a nine year old girl ties her pretty new shoes,
then takes the hand of this devil in a suit.
Confused by the smile on his face, so absolute.
As they walk away into a world so vile and depraved.
She looks back at her mother, trying to remember her face.
This precious, once wild eyed child,
Finds herself in a world of pain, so defiled.
Killing that gentle soul, dealing with devil hands taking its toll.
Molding her dreams of freedom, to cold derision.
Crying inside about her parents decision.
This line in the poem clearly describes all the slavery that had gone through in the world. When I read just a tidbit of this, inside me: all I can do is just cry a waterfall of endless tears, though my feelings lay hidden.