Hi.  This is a beautifully read poem.  You demonstrate a great command of language, and I think it's great how you can keep a solid rhythm.  All of your lines seems just the right size and are very well timed.  One of the things I think works well for you in this work is the assonance of the 'i' sound.  "Hide," "inside," "mine," and all the rest tie the piece together with 'night,' and the last line rhyme with "night" complements this, so great job!  I also really loved the line "we frolic through collanades of heavens deep."  It gives a terrific visual which really connects me to your message.

A few things that tripped me up a bit were you word choice, particularly "empirical flight."  What do you mean by that, exactly?  I couldn't really get my head around it.  I can see how the kiss can feel flight, but does "empirical" really work there then?

Your use of "O" and "Alas" also struck me.  I used these in some of my own writing, and when revisiting it, I found that their use seemed a litle old fashioned.  Maybe this is what you're going for, but it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem.  It can be tricky, but trying to find a similar, more modern usage that expresses the same meaning as "Alas" will help keep the work on track.  I'm sorry I don't have any suggestions for it, but I'll think on it.

A little more minor things, I'd look into  your punctuation.  It works well in some places, like the ellipses after "Long, stay this night" which do well to drag it out like the narrator wants.  Good placement!  However, commas such as after "I, dare not sigh" seem strange, as I find the pause there a bit awkward.  Also, did you intend to leave out the comma in your last line, "Long stay this night"?  Just one more thing: I think changing "Where pathos become the portholes" to "Where pathos becomes the porthole" or "a porthole" will help that line read more smoothly and give a clearer image.

Sorry if this is a bit much, but I really like this piece.  Like I said, it's beautifully crafted and has great language.  It has great potential.  I think with a little revision, you could make this a fantastic read.    Please let me know if you have any questions about what I wrote or what I didn't pick up on.  Thanks for the good work!

 Whoa. This indeed is a beautiful poem. It is like a manuscript that you had further written from the lightened path of your angelic soul, Angel W O Wings.

Long, stay this night...

Where pathos become portholes
And lovers become immortal
When she wraps her eyes inside
my soul, and hides

I sigh...

O,

Long, stay this night...

So moments seem to wait and gather
her greatest find
To open her eyes to mine
Alas, to kiss her lips with empirical flight

O,

Long, stay this night...

We frolic through colonnades of heavens deep
Struggle up the hills of sleep
May she fall farther into me
Never we end this in blight

Within your soul shall be a a further light that ends, guides, and illuminates your path....

Another fabulous poem! I always enjoy seeing that you have posted something new. This is absolutely stunning in imagery and flow. Actually, it is so good that I do not want to stop reading, ha. So I guess the only thing I can say that you could possibly add more. The ending fits, but I could definitely see more being added to it. Also, someone had previously mentioned that some of the word choice is old fashioned, but I must say, it really works for this poem. It is a beautiful, romantic that piece that reminds of a romance in medieval times. Sort of makes me swoon, haha.