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Thank you again for critiquing "Aubade"! You have an excellent eye, and I love to hear your speculation. Sadly, the entirety of the Heaven plot is mapped out, but your suggestion of something based on the Iblis story is very interesting, indeed, and I'm very sorry that I can't use it. Also, it's too bad that you mentioned City of Angels; I hate that movie! I also worry that the way angels work is too similar, but I think the context is different enough that it's okay. I don't really care; this idea has been brewing since before I saw that movie, anyway. I'm sorry I ramble so on your scratchpad! Thanks, and have a nice day.
Thank you so much for your critique of "Aubade"! It was unexpected and delightful. You made some interesting points. First, let me assure you that the physical laws relating to angels will be explained in future chapters. Also, you brushed on something very insightful when you spoke of Icharus's human nature, and connected it to his reason for falling. I'm really impressed, I never thought that so much meaning would be able to be picked up through a few words - well done. That insight even helped me; I hadn't realized before, but now I see that it's true; it's Icharus's humanity that makes him good, and the lack of it that makes the other angels pale in comparison. Thanks a lot for that, and I hope that maybe you'll like the next few chapters as I put them up. Thank you, thank you!
I'm glad it helped. And thanks for reading Love Warriors! I'm glad you're enjoying it.

P.S. I rule your wall, er, I mean scratchpad.
Thanks, again, for taking a look at the next chapter! I've been working on this for about a year now and I'm currently revising like crazy to work out the kinks. Your feedback helps out a lot! Thanks again!
Thanks for reading and critiquing both Dissent and my prologue. You gave some really use feedback and I appreciate it.
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Begins in the middle of the story, following the musings of a SEAL platoon Officer in Charge (OIC) on his way to Paraguay out of Brazil. He is beaten, tired, worn, and licking the wounds of yesterday. » Read...
Learn about some operational developments, a few surprises, and some of the other people in the lives of our heroes. » Read...
Get to know the family of Moggs, learn a little about the situation in Brazil (over drinks of course) and meet a rather conflicted character. » Read...
Get a peek at the mission that our heroes will soon embark upon and get another look at Melencampe. » Read...

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On Fill The World With Beauty, by Casper:  This story is very well written. I particularly like the narrator, providing us a very introspective look into his thou... » Read more...
On Daniel Sans, by Israel Cruz:  This is a very original story, but there are a few suggestions I have for your work. To start off with, I would suggest... » Read more...
On Trouble with Orphans: From the Desk of a College Admission Office, Chapter 1: The Orphanage, by Russell Nakamura:  As a current college student, the first paragraph spoke volumes to me. I can truly relate this as I have often been qui... » Read more...
On Well of Life Project, Chapter 1, by Russell Nakamura:  Had an opportunity to read the first chapter of this work and I'm glad I took the time to do so. Everything seemed ... » Read more...
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