Hi,

Thanks so much for your detailed critique! It's really helpful and I'll definitely keep everything you said in mind for the next draft!

Thanks! It was one of the few pieces of Neverwhere art that I could find online.

Congrats on your contest win

This will be my first conference. I'm SO excited!! I'll defintely be spreading the word about Scribo!!!

Thanks for critiquing it!!! I'm submitting it to be reviewed by the professionals at the Writing The Region conference in Gainesville, FL. I'll be there next month, and I'll start a thread to FYI everyone on what happens there!

I will have a chance to rub elbows with agents, editors, people in the publishing business. I doubt I'll be picked up, but the experience would be valuable!!!

Thanks Bob! I was worried because I thought it was kind of drawn out =/ but I didn't want to just leave something lackluster lol

hi, bob--
thanks for slogging through my second chapter! this is literally a first draft, written during nanowrimo last november when i was winging everything just to make my daily word count.
you're completely right about the lack of paragraph spacing, the excessive rambling, the too-quick escalation of the disaster. i plan on fixing these issues, and adding enough of my larger story that what's here makes a lot more sense--i hope i can call on you then for another read? i promise it'll be easier going next time.

thanks again, you brave soul!

Hello, Bob. Thanks for your message. You can come by my profile and read my works, your treat.

hi, bob--
oh, great googly moogly, you've chosen the novel. *ulp*
coolio. thanks for taking a stab at it!

Bob- Thanks for the critique! I've not been able to get any solid feedback on anything for a while, so this helped out a lot. I was also wondering (and perhaps you can't remember now, in which case, that is fine) if knowing that my short story was really more of a prologue of a novella I was working on might change your critique at all? I'm not saying it has to, I'm simply curious. Again, thanks for the critique!