Thanks for your thoughtful critique on the House that life built. I appreciated your comments. I think I might have corrected some of the issues. That poem was written at a very tumultuous time in my life that last many years. I was glad some of that came through even if it wasn't as effective as I had hoped. I printed as it was written about 12 years ago.

Thanks for the critique. The poem was about the delight of chasing the female energy in everything. The I, in the beginning was more a Subject and a State, not a continued sentence or thought process. Like I, robot. Thanks again, I'll look into some of the phrasing. You the man!

Hi! Just another thank you for your other critique! I really appreciate it.

Britain,

Thank you for your critique. To hear my thoughts were clear on paper is the greatest compliment for a writer like me. It's the only time I feel I have order...when I write.

Hi man, sorry if my critique was a bit brutal, but all you are going to get is my thoughts/opinions. I try not to sugar-coat things, specially on the internet. I hope I helped in some way.

Thanks for commenting on my poem! Yeah, I know there's a few errors, but I thought I HAD put a comma after movies, but I may have left it out because when I write a poem, it just flows out and I don't usually go back over it much.

Great! I don't run into many people who do have the same birthday as myself. I added some of your stuff to my reading list.
Disclaimer on my critiques: I try to be honest - even if it's not a "glowing" critique after all comments in critiques are really only opinion.
I hope to post something soon. I have been so busy with my kids and work I have not been vigilant in my writing.

Thanks for looking at my poem. I really appreciate your insights.

-Ben

No, no problem, Britain. There was no way you could've known.

(What's your favorite Shakes play?)

HI
Thanks for the critique! I have problems finishing my work so I wanted to stick to something short and cram it full of detail. I did leave the description of the actual person out on purpose because I think it could be anyone doing this. I did however try to touch on the reasoning for his action, but didn't explain it clearly enough. Lol..thanks for your critique it helped a lot. As far as that English major thing...I'm pretty sure i'm not doing that any more. I would love to, but I'm kind of uncertain about the job market for an English major.
Ok thanks again for the comments.