Well, it was there. Like the mountain. Had to get my feet wet somewhere. I read a lot of things on scribophile, and your piece spoke to me for some reason. I really enjoyed it, and think you're a good writer. When I get it together and post something, I hope you'll read it!

Well, short or not, that was very helpful. Thank you. I think 3 was my least favorite chapter that I've written, so I'm going to take a lot of time to smooth out some of the illogical parts, just to improve it all around.

Happy to help friend! Press on, I'll keep reading

Same to you

Glad you liked the second chapter. Admittedly, my chapters are pretty short. It reads better when you have the whole thing in front of you, but unfortunately this is the only format I have. Sorry about that.

Thanks for the fantastic critique. I changed the sentences you pointed out; I think those parts flow better. Yeah, you can tell that the narrator is about 16 - this is probably going to end up being YA fiction. Hope it doesn't affect your opinion of it too much.

Otherwise, I'm very pleased that you liked so many parts of it. I'll get more chapters up as soon as I can. Thanks again.

So true. And I'd rather read a sentence or two in passive voice than "I' over and over. The two examples I cited were the only ones that really stuck out to me. =)

Thank you so much for reading "Reprise"! It really helps to know that someone's interested. I always worry that my writing style is hard to get into, so I really appreciate your thoughts. Yes, I know; Anuel's a great character, in my head, who I can't seem to nail. I'm thinking it through and will go back and edit. I'll also change Icharus' explanation of Arend's past. Maybe he knows a little more than he's letting on. Thank you again!

I plan to read chapter two sometime today...

Thanks for the flowers

Katie

Caleb! I cannot thank you enough for your critique of "Reprise"! It certainly means a lot to have anyone read it. Of course you pointed out my big, dumb mistake, and I'll be sure to get on that.Thank you again!