Charlotte,
Come back, we miss you. I've made some changes to the FFF that you might enjoy. Check out my recent forum post for more details.

-Ben

hey, char--
i just finished reading chapters 4-8 of 'time to pretend', and i'm dying!! i must know what happens next!! i abandoned everything else i was doing (which i never do) and read straight through, riveted--i love matt and david, (and gavin's pretty darned cool, too), am intrigued by the growing serial killer mystery aspects, and hope to GOD you're working on the next chapter right now. you are, right?
(and by the by: i used to live in houston--i grew up in clear lake city, and worked in the river oaks neighborhood for about a year. )

I'm glad you liked the poem! and if you like morbid, have I got a vast collection you might like ;D. Cannibal Candy Shop is in my collection on scribophile if you haven't read it yet...that's pretty morbid. I wish I could post them all, but scribophile won't let me post anymore :-\. At any rate, I appreciate the critique and it's good to know people like my poems! cheers!

have you finished reading snuff? i haven't even started it yet!

hey charlotte, thanks a lot for the critique! i've been working on my revision on the prologue for a few days now and i continue to. i can't wait to read the new chuck book! i'm reading 1984 right now and as soon as i'm done, i'm reading snuff!

hey, char--
the smiley face killings made mainstream news:
http://news.aol.com/story/_a/do-smiley-face-killers-hunt-students/20080522094509990001?icid=1615988631x1202944511x1200306355

Palahniuk's Snuff comes out tuesday!

Oh lucky 13. I had Alex Cabal take care of it so now you won't see a confusing critique. But it turns out I read Chapter 1 already! I'm looking forward to the next chapters.

So Charlotte, I had Time to Pretend open in a different tab and I started doing a critique for Riah Rain. Well, when I submitted the critique, it posted to your story and not hers. I apologize and have no idea how that happened. I'll make it up to you.

Oh and one more thing. Should I start from the beginning for Time to Pretend or do you want feedback on separate chapters?