i forgot to mention: i agree with you about the capitalizing every line thing--thank you for freeing me from that misconception.
and the thing with the 'painted'--i totally missed that. yeesh. will fix! thanks again, sensei circus.

*gurgle* oh, i'm so psychic-hugging you right now. thank you for reading my lil poem, jenn! thank you even more for really diving in there and 'getting' it!! *sigh* i feel all tingly, as if i could use a cigarette.
you help me feel as if me & poetry may actually fit together someday. thank you thank you!
(i may be taking it a bit far, but i'm really excited right now by your critique. ) you rock!!

jjeeeeennnn!!! (singsong)
whatcha doooin? hope you're feeling better.
if you're feeling up to it, would you mind taking a peek at my 'bigtop dreams' poem? it's short and goofy, and i'd like to know what you think about it...you are my poetical mentor & all.
(are you entering the HORROR contest this month?)

Thanks for the comment. I really appreciate it. I'll look forward to reading your critique!

Thanks for the critique of Karma Repairman. You weren't mean at all. In fact, please be more mean to me. I think that you are strong where I am weak, so the more comments I can get from you the better. Thanks again.
-Ben

Those are big red flags indeed! I'll see if I can cut out my verbosity. I agree with the levity and moroseness thing as well. I think I'll cut the morose, given the overall feeling of the piece. At the end he's supposed to be thinking "Oh crap, what if I pick up the bag AND IT STARTS AGAIN?" but I admit it's not very clear. Thanks for your critique!

hey, that's great! i'm looking forward to reading it when i have the time to mull and ponder. good luck in the contest!

garrgh. i hadn't thought about it, really. my poetry's nothing fabulous, especially not compared to yours! i could enter for the exercise, i suppose...i'm looking forward to reading your entry, either way.

hey, jenn!
soooo, what'd you decide to do with your contest entry this month?

Hey Circus, something seems wrong with your FFFF piece, the first two pages are blank. As far as I know it's not me, but it could be.