Dankton Lane
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Dankton Lane
Trying not to spill
On the milky path
Stretchmarking the first field
That bellies up from the coastal plain.
Behind and beneath
Stumpy bungalows and rusting trees
Blacken against the bonfire sky.
A bus rattles around
Mickey Mouse Town,
Primary bright in the dusk.
I look back to where
The cliffs gleam like baby teeth
In the bay’s gum-red jaw.
Above me is the unchristened iron hill.
This is not the countryside,
Nagged by the A27’s colicky whine.
The fishing villages are long swamped
On their thin windy strip
By a scurvy lip
Of industrial flats and mock Tudor enterprise.
The sea beyond is sullen
In its lack of charm, it’s narrow prospects.
Even at this remove
I try to see the window where you were born.
It is something to know, there in that chalky molar
Pushing up through Brighton’s prickly roots,
Bloodied by a flecked sun.
Here, below, I see an angle of our own roof
Ina mossy swaddle of satellite orchards.
And your window, beacon bright
In this be-littered landscape,
Where you are a hinge in time.
A kissing gate in the stony allotment
Of a snagged life.
D E Woodhouse



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Such marvelous imagery! You take my breath away with your ability to sustain and continue a thread throughout the poem.
Right down to the end, you continue to astound me to the point that I don't want the poem to end. I would like to see more of your work. Please don't be discouraged if it takes a while for people to critique. I think they must be simply speechless with admiration and unable to find anything to criticize!