On Next Time, by Meris Yates: I like this.  I think you could make it into a really nice prose poem.  It already has a lot going for it.  I ... » Read more...

On Flowers On Graves, by Joey D.T.: I really like the alliteration you used in this poem.  I think it clashes well with the technical descriptions.  So... » Read more...

On My Friend Misery, by K. L. Raynor:  Very nice personification and descriptions. To the critiquer before me (cause it's bugging me for some reason...lol... » Read more...

On Tragic Hearts, Chapter 3: A Twist of Fate, Love, and Lies, by Ariadne President: Hmmm... I've read this story twice now.  I definitely like the idea.  Actually, all in all, I think it's ve... » Read more...

On Briefcases do not Belong in Kitchens, by P K: I think your idea is very interesting.  However, you describe this piece of writing as this woman's story, therefore... » Read more...

On My New Best Friend, by Ink Weaver:  This is very cute!   It makes me want another kitty!....already have 3. hehe This poem was very cute and play... » Read more...

On I Know I've Been Here Before, by Kay Moore:  I've just realized that this could be fiction.  Is it?  I'm embarassed. haha ... » Read more...

On The Bed, by Dear Daisy:  In case anyone is interested, I posted my rewrite of this poem. ... » Read more...

On I Know I've Been Here Before, by Kay Moore:  Kay, I'm so sorry for your loss, and I wish you the best of luck in helping your other friend. As for this piece, I... » Read more...

On The Bed, by Dear Daisy: Thanks so much for your comments and critiques Bob! Yes, I know the rhyme is forced a bit.  As I said in the intro it... » Read more...

On Conquest, by Dear Daisy:  Ah, good call.  I agree with you.  The line is sans comma now. ... » Read more...

On The Evertree Tales, Chapter 1: Pirates, Baseboards, and Churches, by Strider212:  I agree with Gianna.  I couldn't get through the first paragraph without feeling overwhelmed and distracted.&n... » Read more...

On Her Pretty New Shoes, by Angel w o Wings:  I start off by saying that poetry critiqueing is not one of my strong suits, however, I will relay to you some of my id... » Read more...

On The Bed, by Dear Daisy:  I do not get the last part of the poem being a love story that you waited to renew. Just to clarifiy, the poem is bas... » Read more...

On I Saw You Again for the First Time, by matthew vanhorn: The beginning of this poem reminded me of a poem I once wrote, the line "I saw you again for the first time," so it intrigued... » Read more...