All I can say about this work of yours is: good. Although it's something we can all relate to when it comes to love and heartache. Should be a musical interlude in my opinion.

An old love story asking for rebirth sounds as if the person has left over feelings for an old love. Very deep and

touchy.

 What a great piece! It seems loosely based on a villanelle which is nice. There's some wonderful imagery in this poem. Particularly like two:

Silence simmers in place of our words

That was probably my favorite line in the poem. However, I had some trouble with this line:

In this dream I pursue

I'm not sure what the "dream" is, or what the speaker is pursuing. I think this idea can be fleshed out a bit more. Maybe add another stanza?

Keep up the great work!

 I liked this piece, the only parts I did not like were the ones that arent there! I think this piece deserves so much more, the concept is great, the lines are great, I cant really critque anything because I need more imput!!!! Good Job I loved what there was of it, let me know if there is more to come, as I would love to read it.thank you for sharing your work

I like the piece but I don't think I interpret it the same way as the others. When I read the line:

Beside a body formally known as you

it makes me see you talking to a dead person. Like you lost this love because of a death and your dream is to recapture that love.

I don't know. Maybe this humidity in Florida is getting to me. But, I DO like it.