I first wrote this as a description exercise at Gotham, so this is carved down from that 1500 word work. Thanks for your helpful crit.

Hope it was clear and helpful! Any clarifications needed on anything I said, just ask.

Will do! Anxious to see what you've done.

hey, dnm--
thanks for your fabulous critique! you've touched on a few things nobody else has, and i'm chewing on those spots. not sure about that last line, either, but i don't wanna let the end drift off. hm. will think on it. much appreciated!

You're welcome! I'm loving microfiction too. My biggest issue is that I'm wordy; it forces me not to be. Gotta love that.

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review a chapter of A Grain of Salt. I know I often use long sentences. It's really helpful when soeone helps he shorten them. Thanks again for all your help. Burgio

Thanks for the great critique on my story. You give good, clear feedback. I sort of suspected that pronoun thing would get me in trouble -- thanks for your direction on it. I think I will look into that Microfiction circle you mentioned. I just think it's a fascinating form. Thanks for the invite!

Dear dnm: Wow! I'm blown away by your detailed critique, which is very much appreciated. You took some serious time helping me out and it will definitely help the story. Thank you very much!

Thanks so much for taking the time to read my work. You've made some great suggestions. Much obliged!

thanks, dnm--
appreciate your feedback! rock on.