looks like you haven't posted in a really long time....are you still writing? would love to read your current stuff!

Louise

hey dnm, the below comment was actually me while on another scribophiler's comp. oops.

I'm glad we agree on Nicholas Sparks, dnm. (I just saw your comment) ( :

Hey, I noticed we're both reading Brother Odd. Where are you in the book? I'm not very far in-chapter 6. I'm having trouble getting into the story, but it's been like that for me with the last 2 "Odd" books as well. I can't seem to get into the story because Dean doesn't seem to know where he's going with the series. My sis said she heard recently that it's just that-Koontz didn't know where he was going with the series until the 4th book, and he thought he'd need 6 books total to wrap up the story, but it turns out he needs 7. How are you liking the book? I'm sure you're much further in than me, so don't tell me anything, except how you're faring with the book. What do you think of this book and the series in general?

hey, take a wee break--you've earned it.

woohoo!!! BIG congrats on 30 stories!!!
wow--that's an achievement!
you gonna take a rest, now? go back and work on one of the stories? write something else entirely?
i'm impressed indeed by your feat.

Thanks for the recommendations. My sister also likes "In Odd We Trust," so I'll get it after she's done with it.

dang, aren't you thoughtful! thanks for the birthday wish, you sweet thang.
now, go! write like the wind, my friend! two more! you can do it!

thank you for your comments! I have made some revisions to warm it up a bit...would love to hear what you think!

I just posted a new piece, I feel it is a bit rough...would love your constructive feedback--if you get a chance. It's titled: strong enough to lean on.
L

There are one or two I want to revisit, yeah. What about you? Any of your (nearly 30 now!) entries you want to hang on to?

p.s. thanks for reading and critiquing my june stuff and "wist". it's always good to get more feedback, and you've probably had a ton of writing of your own you've wanted to focus on, so i appreciate it! and i'm glad you were mildly entertained ( :

Thanks for the welcome. =D

thank you =)

My God, man! Who could forget Brother Odd? It's part of the series; Stevie Wonder couldn't overlook it, so there's no chance I will!
Along with Koontz and King, I'm in love with (but don't limit it to) Poe, Lovecraft, Shakespeare and J.K. Rowling. "Dracula" is definitely a favorite book, as is Poe's "Hop-Frog," "Beowulf" and King's "Bag of Bones."
If King and Koontz are favorites of yours (as your bookshelf suggests), I assume you could offer some good authors similar to them?

Hey! Thanks!

In the end, there's something to be said for work with meaning, rather than work to fulfill an obligation, so that's what's led me to focus on other projects. You take away what you want to from things, so I think it would only be a waste if you let yourself consider it as such. That's my two cents.

Yeah, I lost all fuel for it. It started to make me not dread, but at least, not look forward to writing. Besides I like to pounce on one piece and shape it until something crops up. Looks like you're sticking in until the end?

Hey there, sorry it took me so long to reply to your note. I have been out of touch, but am back on line now. I just read your piece and commented. I think you do description beautifully.
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Yeah, that's my ultimate goal with this story, so I figured start off that way from the very beginning.

Hey dnm --

The reason I underline the thoughts is because that's how you're supposed to do it when submitting to professional publications. I have my word processor set to follow the specifications of this template: http://shunn.net/format/story.html.

Hope that helps explain!

Back at you. Stephen King is the man, isn't he? Besides you anyway

sure thing! so you know, i'm not going to go hardcore critique on these challenge stories until everyone's had the chance to rework them, do what they're gonna do in edits, that sort of thing. but i'm happy to send you my impressions!

hey! thanks for the comments--you've definitely kicked ass this month with the challenge. i've missed several days, but i'm trying to stay in the game.
i'm cheering you on, handing you gatorade as you run by--go, dnm, go!

Thank you for the critique. I am embarrassed now. I thought I had posted the clean version. Al's hammer strikes again. heh.

No, its ok! I wasn't aware there was an actual challenge XD! Lol, I'm SO out of the loop XD! I have read all your entries so far and I think they are simple brilliant ^-^!

Thank you for the wonderful comment! Yes, I saw those typos, but thanks for pointing them out! Now i get to comment or critique one of yours again!

Lol, ok. Thanks very much for reading them and critiqueing (sp?) them! Although, no offense, I don't plan on changing them because I believe the first draft is the best but I may just change it on here and not in my backups ^-^.

You're very welcome ^-^! lol, ok. I sould be able to, I spent a lot of time working to get karma points so I will be posting new stuff soon.

hey, dnm--
thanks for your critique today! i'm glad you liked 'desert fire'.
i do sometimes have issues with consistent tense, so i'll make sure to check for that when i go through again. i'll also take a look at those fragments--i appreciate very much you reading and commenting! you rock!

Ah, no problem. Thanks for reading some of my stuff. The challenge is taking a bit out of me, too. I keep wanting to stop and develop these pieces, but I barely have time to finish one before it's time to start another. But the result has been pretty fantastic for everyone so far from what I've seen.

Thanks

ha! my blood & injury collection-- thanks again for your supportive comments, dnm!

hi, dnm--
no floundering!
you're welcome for the comments on your stories; you really have impressed me!
i know i get frustrated sometimes, when it feels like i'm putting forth a lot of effort and hearing nothing back, but hang in there. people do notice, and they read, if they don't critique or comment often enough.
i'm excited to see what you cook up next, so don't stop now!

Thank you! I think my poem is better now :]

Thanks for reading my poem :]
It helped a lot, and as soon as I finish writing here, I'm going to fix it!
Oh, and by the way, I love Dean Koontz too!

Thanks for reading The Jacksonville Incident. and commenting on it. Maybe someday a cure will be found! And belated happy birthday. Mine was the 26th so I noticed yours.

Thank you for your comments! I'm afraid fragments have haunted me all my life...can't seem to get a proper handle on them. Embarrassing...thank you again for your helpful comments and careful edits!
Louise

I've updated the piece again. If you get a chance, I'd love for you to read it.

Again, many thanks for all your helpful comments and critiques!
Louise

Just a quick scribble to let you know the updated version is up. If you get a chance, take a look.

Many thanks,
Louise

Thank you, thank you, thank you!

xvermonter

Thank you so much for commenting! I am going to put it in the past. I did a re-read using the past and I think it doesn't lose anything. It was challenging to get it to read okay in the present...I think the past is easier, no? Thanks again. Will let you know later this month when the updated version is up!

Best,
Louise

I just posted a revised chapter, I'm wondering ifyou'd take a look? I find your comments so helpfull... it is just under a 1,000 words...

Louise

Hi again! Thanks for giving it another read. I just added a couple of phrases that I think tidied it up...at least I hope it did!

Again, THANKS
Louise

Hello! thanks for reading my piece. I changed the tense back to the past. would you mind reading it again and letting me know if it reads more smoothly? I am trying to figure out the best way to include the flashback without confusing the reader...I don't have itallic capabilities with my membership...thanks!

Hey, I just read your critique for From The Mind of Me and just wanted to say thanks. It's still very much a work in progress, and I haven't had time to work on it lately, but I appreciate the feedback because I'm still not really sure where the story is going. I just sort of start writing and that's what comes out. Anyway, thanks, and I look forward to reading more of your work.

HI DNM,
Sorry I am late in writing this, but I wanted to thank you for reading and critiquing my short story Pears. I gave me great feedback! Thanks, I think it will help the piece a lot. I can't wait to read your work.
Traci

Hey! Do you wanna read some of my works? Just contact me on my scratchpad. In order to do so, just click my name, scroll from my profile, you will see it and below the scratchpad are my works. Read any that you want!

I read 'Isness' again. The formatting did the trick for creating clarity...the two speakers are far better defined.

I think your poem is amazing.

Louise

Hey, I just commented on Untitled.

Hello dnmtwthlsrbm! Do you wanna read my works? I have always wanted to read yours. Just click my name, scroll down to latest works and read and commment and vote on My Boyfriend's A Vampire and Passions of a Tempted Kind of Angel. Tell me what you thought of them while I get to read your works, ok?

Thanks for your critique!
One thing I want to explain about this particular story is that I'm doing something I don't normally do. I'm taking a leaf from Neil Gaiman, Douglas Adams, and Dave Eggers in that I'm trying to give it a "stream of consciousness" style of narration. That's why I left a lot of sentences that would normally be conbined as separate ones. A period makes the separation between each thought more pronounced than what a comma presents.
Just thought I'd share that with you. Thanks for the critique, again.

Hi Thanks for taking the time to read my story. Your critique was great. I haven't really done any rewrites yet, and this is stream of consciousness writing, All my writing is like thiis. The result is I sometimes have some run on sentences. I try not to, but hey, it happens. Thanks for pointing this out to me. I obviously didn't catch it before I posted. I'll take care of all of that on the rewrite. Also, thanks for your comments and suggestions. I'll be able to use them later on the revision,

Have a good week.
Cathy

Cathy

I <3 Deety

thanks a lot for the critique! im really considering the "seeming a swan in pose" idea; it really seemed to flow more to me. thanks again!

hi, dmn--
thanks for your comments on 'scratching the surface'!
i'm so pleased you liked it, and i hope reading it at work wasn't too...jarring.
muchas gracias!