June Challenge, Chapter 7: June 23-26
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Month-long daily unedited flash fiction challenge.
See "June Challenge" circle or "June:A Challenge" thread on Community forums for details.
Chapter Description
The Great Disaster: A world in trouble
Searching: Eh
School Supplies: The first day of fourth grade
The Magic Show: A great new trick
Second to last chapter :)
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The Great Disaster
When the carnage began, I was brushing my teeth. It seems trivial
now, but I was always very careful about my teeth. I brushed every
morning and every night, and sometimes in between. I'll admit I
wasn't much of a flosser, but I was an excellent brusher. Side to
side, up and down, around in circles. And I always rinsed, morning
and night. I went to work every morning and to bed every night with
minty fresh Linsterine breath. A lot of good it ended up
doing..
As I was finishing my bottom teeth and moving on to the top, I
heard the first crash. No, heard isn't right; I felt the first
crash. I later came to know that this was the first of the
seventy-five major meteor strikes that would be called The Great
Disaster. All I knew then was that it felt like the planet was
exploding. At the first boom, the lights went out instantly.
Blackness engulfed my bathroom. I managed to grab the sides of the
sink to keep from falling. The rumbling lasted almost an entire
minute. Once it seemed to be over, I made my way into the bedroom
carefully in the dark.
Rendered essentially blind, my other senses became instantly
heightened. I could feel the texture of the carpet between my toes.
I never knew I had such soft carpet. I could hear the car alarms
outside, and distant shouting of people who were caught in much
less promising circumstances than I was. I wanted to help them, but
I knew there was nothing I could do.
As I continued shuffling into my room, my legs hit the side of my
bed, and I stopped. Feeling my way to the nightstand, I found the
phone. As I expected, there was no dial tone. I looked toward
the room's only window. It was pitch black outside. I shuffled my
way around the bed to the other side of the room. With arms
outstretched in case some large obstacle had wandered into my room
in the dark, I reached the wall with the window. The flashing
lights of cars with sounding alarms provided the only illumination.
As far as I could see, power was out everywhere. As much as I
wanted to see what was going on, I knew nothing could be done until
morning. Once it was light out, we could all assess the damage. If
only I had known what was to come.
We have all been told there were seventy-five major strikes
world-wide. In our small western Massachusetts town, we felt
seventeen. That night was the longest I've ever experienced. Crash
after crash, I still had no idea what was happening. My first
thought had been earthquake. We had never had earthquakes before,
but anything was possible. After the fifth strike, I began to doubt
my assessment. Actually, it was more hope than doubt: if there had
been five earthquakes, I expected I would fall through a crack into
the center of the earth sometime soon. The thought of meteors
honestly never crossed my mind. Until the morning. By then, word
had spread from people closer to the landing sites.
When the sun finally rose over our broken city, everyone took to
the streets. It's amazing how much tragedy does to bring a
community together. Unfortunately, all the togetherness in the
world couldn't have helped much. Buildings had fallen. Fires had
sprung up where cars had been struck. Water from a nearby river was
flowing slowly down Merchant Street. The town's beautiful trees,
our pride and joy in a country of such expansion and commercialism,
were in disarray. Almost all had fallen. Houses were crushed.
Families were crushed. There was almost nothing left.
I noticed that the movement of people had taken on a uniform
direction. I looked in the direction they were headed and saw one
massive building still standing above the wreckage: our town
center. All the people of the city were headed toward the
auditorium.
If ever we needed to call a town meeting, this was the time.
1347 6/26/08
Searching
As I tore through the closet, I knew it was no use. I was never going to find it. Sweat was dripping from my forehead as I leaned over the boxes. Lid after lid I grabbed and threw over my shoulder. Boxes were overturned across my room,



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go, dnm, go!
you've done a great job with these daily stories this month--in quantity and quality, both. you have so many strong starting points to work from now, and your portfolio must be bursting at the seams at this point.
the first two stories in this chapter caught my attention (and affection) with their desperate tones and singular perspectives. i hava an affinity for apocalypse scenarios, so your meteor story hit close to home for me. loved it. would love to hear more about how your mc navigates this world after the catastrophe.
in your second story, you bring across the desperation in your character well. the intensity didn't let up, and i was intrigued, wondering what this person was searching for. the mystery deepened when we discover the letter. oooh, good stuff. both stories are contenders for expanding.
keep going! you're our only hope for making it to the end of the challenge!! *waves pom poms*