June Challenge, Chapter 7: June 23-26
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Month-long daily unedited flash fiction challenge.
See "June Challenge" circle or "June:A Challenge" thread on Community forums for details.
Chapter Description
The Great Disaster: A world in trouble
Searching: Eh
School Supplies: The first day of fourth grade
The Magic Show: A great new trick
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looking where she was going. As she went through the day in her
head, she began to drift from the curb. First, we'll meet our
homeroom teacher, Mrs. Johnson. Then we'll play a game to meet our
classmates. Unlike most people, Ariel enjoyed the silly games
they always played to learn everyone's names. Next, we'll have
math. I wonder what kind of math we learn in fourth grade? After
math comes English. I wonder if we'll have to take grammar tests
this year. Ariel didn't like grammar very much. It'll
probably be lunch time by then. We'll walk as a class to the
cafeteria----
SMASH
When the police showed up at the scene, the street was littered with notebooks, folders, pencils, pens, an R.L. Stine book, and a journal.
"What the hell is this?" Officer Crumpler had stepped on Ariel's lucky keychain. He picked it up and looked at it curiously.
"It's a rabbit's foot," said Officer Stanley. "You've never seen once before? It's supposed to bring you good luck."
"Lot of good it did her," Crumpler said, dropping it in an evidence bag. He looked at the mangled body on the street below him and shook his head. "Drunk drivers, at seven in the morning. What is the world coming to.."
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The Magic Show
Cameron hated his younger brother so much that one day, he
decided to get rid of him. He didn't want to kill Connor; he just
wanted to make him disappear. Cameron had been performing magic
shows for his family for three years, and he had gotten quite good
at it. In fact, he may have been the best nine-year-old magician in
the world. Connor had insisted on being Cameron's assistant. He was
jealous of the attention Cameron got from their parents. Whenever
they would perform toegether, Connor would always mess up the
tricks to try to make people laugh. Cameron got sick of it. He had
stopped letting Connor help him with his shows, but Connor still
tried to annoy him every chance he got. Cameron just wanted him to
go away, so he came up with a plan. One Friday night, Cameron
approached his brother.
"Hey Connor, wanna help me with a show tomorrow?"
Connor was excited at first, but then he started to think about it.
"I thought you hated when I helped you with your shows. You told me
I could never help you again."
"I know. I'm sorry. This is gonna be a really good show, though.
It's gonna be hard, so I need your help." Cameron knew that if he
pretended hard enough, Connor would fall for it.
"Yeah? What's so hard about it?" Connor wanted to be suspicious,
but he was too excited by the idea of getting to be in the
show.
"I have a new trick to try. It's gonna be really good, but I can't
do it by myself. I need an assistant. I don't know. If it's too
hard for you, maybe I could find someone else." Cameron pretended
to think of who else could help with his new trick.
"No, I can do it! What kind of trick is it?"
"It's a disappearing trick. It takes a lot of magic, and a lot of
concentration. Are you sure you're not gonna mess it up?"
"I can do it! I swear!"
Cameron pretended to think for a minute, but then agreed to let
Connor help him. Cameron had read in a magic book how to do a
disappearing trick that wasn't really a trick. That's what had
given him the idea. He thought if he could just get the trick
right, Connor would be gone forever. As he walked with his brother
into the room they shared, he noticed his mom watching them from
the kitchen. What he didn't notice was that she had his magic book
in her hands. She had read the part about the trick, and figured
out Cameron's plan. This had given her a plan of her own. When she
was tucking Connor into bed, while Cameron was in the bathroom, she
and her younger son had a talk.
The next day, Cameron and Connor got up early to prepare for the
big show. Cameron taught his brother some little tricks that they
were going to do first. They were simple tricks that he knew Connor
couldn't mess up. Everything had to go perfectly so they



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go, dnm, go!
you've done a great job with these daily stories this month--in quantity and quality, both. you have so many strong starting points to work from now, and your portfolio must be bursting at the seams at this point.
the first two stories in this chapter caught my attention (and affection) with their desperate tones and singular perspectives. i hava an affinity for apocalypse scenarios, so your meteor story hit close to home for me. loved it. would love to hear more about how your mc navigates this world after the catastrophe.
in your second story, you bring across the desperation in your character well. the intensity didn't let up, and i was intrigued, wondering what this person was searching for. the mystery deepened when we discover the letter. oooh, good stuff. both stories are contenders for expanding.
keep going! you're our only hope for making it to the end of the challenge!! *waves pom poms*