A Strong Woman
short story, drama
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Feb. 28, 2008, 9:06amWord Count:
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If behind every strong man is a strong woman then how is it that John can cheat on his wife after seventeen years?
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me is that strong. It wasn’t the first time in my life I could be
strong because of you. It’s what makes me a strong man. Because
you’re a strong woman.”
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I found the storyline, told from the two protagonists point of view, to be interest-provoking. As a reader, I wanted to read all the way to the end to see how a situation that so many couples have or will face would turn out.
I felt the beginning and middle of the story to be well drawn out as far as details and insights; the conclusion perhaps a little less so, with a pat, unsurprising ending--which in and of itself is not a negative, but does draw more attention to the skimpier details at the conclusion.
That being said, there were some spelling errors "In darkness Susan starred at the glow of the monitor;" " She was a stay at home wife which had been a decision" as examples. ("Stared" and "stay-at-home" the corrections.)
In addition, there were more than a few errors in grammar/punctuation: "In darkness Susan starred at the glow of the monitor -her face a wash of all color and;" "They’ve been arguing lately about not being as close as they should be.;" and "John pulled up to the driveway of his mistress apartment." ("monitor--her" "They'd" and "mistress's" the corrections.)
Some of the paragraphs are a bit run-on, but that could be easily fixed.
All-in-all, this piece is very salvageable and deserves the attention to detail to make it an excellent example of writing.
Well Mr. Moody...
For someone who not much into the romance writing, you have most definitely conquered the heart of the reader! I like to write newly created romances but you have the talent to write the kind that readers may be able to relate to better. I write fairy tales (course I believe in fairy tales) and you have written something more true to life and realistic. Can't say that I have had the experience of the kind of love and life you have written here, but who knows someday maybe. I really liked the piece... You must be a man who knows the reality of true love! Good for you... The words you used, held a certain power as you wrote them, maybe you should consider a new genre...LOL! I look forward to more of "whatever" you decide to write...I find I have become a bigger fan...write on...