Forgotten Regrets
poetry
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April 13, 6:09pmWord Count:
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A sestina - one of the most challenging forms I have ever attempted. Thanks for reading. All comments and critiques are appreciated.
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Baritone vibrations through my ear and I forget
Though I often walk the tightrope between passion and regret
The slightest breeze reminds me of your breath
Hot and sweet upon my neck, caressing me back from death
As I stand at her door remembering your fingertips
Gliding across the contours of my body, tracing blistered lips
Kisses soft and tender, tongues dancing in and over lips
The world slides away into the mist, making me forget
The passion and impulse of our youth that we both regret
Though some say this life is nothing but a breath
I would believe in eternity again if I could be with you in death
Though the grave would eventually claim us with her clinging fingertips
When I go to sleep at night, my body craves your fingertips
In my dreams I linger for the pleasure of your lips
Slowly I awaken, dazed and dizzy, trying hard not to forget
Dreams evanescence in morning’s light and I know I’ll soon regret
That I could not stay longer before sunlight stole illusion’s breath
Sometimes the sweetest dreams seem to die the cruelest death
Desire conquers reason as we flirt carelessly with death
I’m swept into the moment as I sense your fingertips
Pressing, caressing, possessing body, hips, and lips
Leaving me with memories that I know I cannot forget
Though all of this could end and leave me saddened with regret
Just to have you close again would be worth my only breath
Fragile whispers late at night riding softly on a breath
Every day without you is like trading hope for death
But I can still close my eyes and feel your fingertips
And the pressure of your passion as you kiss my crimson lips
As I slip into my reverie where I know I can forget
This distance here between us which is my one regret
It is the future that I long for that tends to soothe this lone regret
Though days without you seem unending, I know someday I’ll feel your breath
Again against my hair, my neck, and body - long before the sigh of death
Once more I’ll know desire from the touch of your fingertips
I’ll feel my heart beat again as you hunger for my lips
Till then I’ll declare as though a prayer – I will not forget, will not forget
The fire in your fingertips caress the edge of waiting lips
Reminding me again this breath of life shall end in death
If there be but one regret, 'twould only come if I dare forget
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Very deep work you got here! So deep that it really got me lost in its flow and rhythm. Good job!
nice but too many rhymes with death and breath.
I really enjoyed this piece. The sentiment and passion are very clear. I like the meter too. My one concern was the repetitions of regret, forget, breath and death. They end most every line. Do you think you can find a way to say the same thing, but use some different metaphores. I like the depth of the thought here, and it is a good work, but I would like to see a little more variety.
Thanks for the post. Keep em coming.
Jeanie...
still chasin the dream for a better tomorrow for all!



Great job! It flowed evenly, holding to the subject throughout the poem. I really enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.