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She's a Natural Disaster

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poetry, short story, horror, history, drama, action, non-fiction
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April 13, 6:19pm

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696

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Attempting one of the most remarkable forms ever conceived. I could never hope to get near his genius, but I hope you read and enjoy it anyway.

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Once upon a time I knew of - a heartless girl bereft of love

Though she lived her life with the most exquisite intensity

Those who observed her stood in awe, her power great, without a flaw

Devastation left her wanting – wanting for affinity

She attracted specious fellows as was her propensity

A natural disaster - she

 

Stormy brooding was her fashion – working up a fit of passion

Those who knew her and watched her spark grow into a bitter flame

Shook their heads and made predictions, tried to stop her with restrictions

Tried to warn others to avoid a void she left without shame

Warnings unheeded, cast aside by all unwilling to claim

                                                                   Life would never be the same

 

A year before she made her move, she sent a friend ahead to prove

That all their dire predictions were nothing but puffs of air

Her friend, Ivan, caused a panic. Heeded advice made folks manic

Barricaded in homes waiting, waiting in breathless terror

The next day came and all was still. Ivan caused them all to swear

                                                                        Not to listen or beware  

 

Planned chaos you could see in her eye. Pressure kept building, drawing nigh

Helpless sheep living their lives in innocent oblivion

Going to church, singing praises, working hard, getting raises

While her hateful heart, cold as ice, eyed a way to come undone

Bubbling ooze of malicious ire drove her mind – crazed and wanton

                                                                        Evil that any would shun

 

So distinct I still remember, ‘twas a Monday near September

She had become a maelstrom of fury that couldn’t be denied

She ripped through town early that morn, killing, crushing, showing her scorn

Women wailing, children crying – crying babies tossed aside

She did not hear – her pain too great just like a forgotten bride

                                                                        Hoping the pain would subside 

 

All she touched of any matter was left broken, torn, and tattered

She didn’t want redemption, she didn’t care to condescend

In fact, she laughed at all their pain – jeering at the weak in disdain 

Anger heaving, seething, swirling, whirling toward a tragic end

Power increasing by the hour too complex to comprehend

                                                                        Disaster - her only friend

 

Her shriek vicious, loudly she squalled. Life and limb she recklessly mauled.

Continuing her campaign through the night and the whole next day         

Pets and people she drowned with ease. Some despaired and fell to their knees

Screaming like a banshee twirling, twirling in a dervish way

She stole their lives taking all that she sought, casting all their hopes away

                                                                                   Leaving all in disarray

 

When she left, they counted the cost. People were scattered, some were lost

Eighteen hundred and thirty six lives were buried in the ground

Shock, grief, depression, homes destroyed. Men lost all that they once enjoyed.

Survivors picked up the pieces through misery most profound

Over seven hundred people have never even been found

                                                                                    They’re still trying to rebound

 

The government, they played their part. They sent in the National Guard

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Discussion

There is nothing to critique so I am left to comment.  Your poem is terrific!!!  I am in awe of writers who can masterfully write using unusual forms which require you to think about the form as much as you think about the content.  Bravo!

Great poem, Elle!

I love how you personify Katrina as a kind of scorned woman. Hell hath no fury, right? The imagery is really powerful. You used powerful nouns and words to pain some very vibrant pictures. Especially "brooding", "ripped", "heaving" and "shriek", to name only a few.

Planned chaos you could see in her eye

Excellent double entendre. Works both for Katrina as a woman and as a hurricane.

The form you use is unusual, but I feel that it lends itself to the grandiose feeling I get out of this poem. Honestly, I'd like to hoist the term "epic" onto this one. And as it covers a contemporary event, it sounds like the kind of art that historians can look to many long centuries from now to learn about events.

A natural disaster - she

As simple as it may be, this is my favorite line because of how it sits in the poem.

Good work! Looking forward to more like it.

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