She's a Natural Disaster
poetry, short story, horror, history, drama, action, non-fiction
Published on:
April 13, 6:19pmWord Count:
696Work Description
Attempting one of the most remarkable forms ever conceived. I could never hope to get near his genius, but I hope you read and enjoy it anyway.
This work is archived and isn't accepting critiques or comments. Why?
Print
Once upon a time I knew of - a heartless girl bereft of love
Though she lived her life with the most exquisite intensity
Those who observed her stood in awe, her power great, without a flaw
Devastation left her wanting – wanting for affinity
She attracted specious fellows as was her propensity
A natural disaster - she
Stormy brooding was her fashion – working up a fit of passion
Those who knew her and watched her spark grow into a bitter flame
Shook their heads and made predictions, tried to stop her with restrictions
Tried to warn others to avoid a void she left without shame
Warnings unheeded, cast aside by all unwilling to claim
Life would never be the same
A year before she made her move, she sent a friend ahead to prove
That all their dire predictions were nothing but puffs of air
Her friend, Ivan, caused a panic. Heeded advice made folks manic
Barricaded in homes waiting, waiting in breathless terror
The next day came and all was still. Ivan caused them all to swear
Not to listen or beware
Planned chaos you could see in her eye. Pressure kept building, drawing nigh
Helpless sheep living their lives in innocent oblivion
Going to church, singing praises, working hard, getting raises
While her hateful heart, cold as ice, eyed a way to come undone
Bubbling ooze of malicious ire drove her mind – crazed and wanton
Evil that any would shun
So distinct I still remember, ‘twas a Monday near September
She had become a maelstrom of fury that couldn’t be denied
She ripped through town early that morn, killing, crushing, showing her scorn
Women wailing, children crying – crying babies tossed aside
She did not hear – her pain too great just like a forgotten bride
Hoping the pain would subside
All she touched of any matter was left broken, torn, and tattered
She didn’t want redemption, she didn’t care to condescend
In fact, she laughed at all their pain – jeering at the weak in disdain
Anger heaving, seething, swirling, whirling toward a tragic end
Power increasing by the hour too complex to comprehend
Disaster - her only friend
Her shriek vicious, loudly she squalled. Life and limb she recklessly mauled.
Continuing her campaign through the night and the whole next day
Pets and people she drowned with ease. Some despaired and fell to their knees
Screaming like a banshee twirling, twirling in a dervish way
She stole their lives taking all that she sought, casting all their hopes away
Leaving all in disarray
When she left, they counted the cost. People were scattered, some were lost
Eighteen hundred and thirty six lives were buried in the ground
Shock, grief, depression, homes destroyed. Men lost all that they once enjoyed.
Survivors picked up the pieces through misery most profound
Over seven hundred people have never even been found
They’re still trying to rebound
The government, they played their part. They sent in the National Guard
Rate This Work
Discussion
Great poem, Elle!
I love how you personify Katrina as a kind of scorned woman. Hell hath no fury, right? The imagery is really powerful. You used powerful nouns and words to pain some very vibrant pictures. Especially "brooding", "ripped", "heaving" and "shriek", to name only a few.
Planned chaos you could see in her eye
Excellent double entendre. Works both for Katrina as a woman and as a hurricane.
The form you use is unusual, but I feel that it lends itself to the grandiose feeling I get out of this poem. Honestly, I'd like to hoist the term "epic" onto this one. And as it covers a contemporary event, it sounds like the kind of art that historians can look to many long centuries from now to learn about events.
A natural disaster - she
As simple as it may be, this is my favorite line because of how it sits in the poem.
Good work! Looking forward to more like it.



There is nothing to critique so I am left to comment. Your poem is terrific!!! I am in awe of writers who can masterfully write using unusual forms which require you to think about the form as much as you think about the content. Bravo!