This is in general pretty good!  I think it would benefit by going over it again and trying to form the rest of the lines into the metre than more than half of them use.

She loses herself in the rocking

Of the corner where she sways

All bundled in this haven

Safely forgetting away the days

The last line here is a particular example:  The other lines all flow very nicely, but this last one sticks out like a sore thumb.  At first I thought it was a lenght issue: Most of the lines are 8 syllables and this one is 10.  But the first line in this part is also 10 syllables and I think it flows wonderfully.

So instead of length, I think it's an issue with metre.  The stresses are weird.  Reading it over several times, and taking bits out, I think the problem word is safely.  My tongue has a hard time recovering from it and jumping into the rest of the line.  So:

She loses herself in the rocking

Of the corner where she sways

All bundled in this haven

Forgetting away the days

Seems to me a lot easier to say.  It has the added benefit of dropping line 4 into tetrametre with (most of) the rest of the lines, too!

To shut away all that is

The life the love the pain

For sometimes it is all too much

And the wish is for life to wane

Lines 1 and 4 are problematic here.  Line 1 doesn't flow too well.  Line 4 is just kind of bland.  "the wish"  What wish?  Obviously "her" wish, so why not just saying?  It's kind of abstract and not a very emotional way of saying it, either.  Depression of this sort is pretty intense, so this kind of hum-drum sciencey way of saying it (wane might be to blame here) doesn't work so well. 

I don't have a good suggestion for line 4, but line 1 might work as:

Shutting away her emotions

Or some other three-syllable word with similar stress.

Just vanish from existence

Even if only for a while

To not go on pretending

Or hiding behind that smile

Line 2 breaks the metre again.  Getting rid of "Even" would fix this, or changing the line entirely.

As every now and then

What just is must be sown

Taking stock of all around

The good the bad the grown

The first two lines here need some work.  The stress needed to make sense of line 2 throws it completely out of whack, instead of reading "What just is", I read "What just is must", which is nonsensical.  That aside, I'm not entirely sure what this stanza is even trying to say.  It's a little too vague.

For in this world of plenty

There is no time for such

So to the corner I must flee

                                             The corner which sees so much

All the lines here make metrical sense, but lines 1 and 2 don't follow very well from the previous stanza.  The previous stanza says that every now and then, it must be sown.  And then this one says there isn't time for it.  It's a bit confusing.

Overall, I did like the poem!  It flows well most of the time and I think with revision of the places that don't it'll be quite effective.  My only other suggestion is to try and cut some of the vagueness and replace it with imagery that will put the reader in the place of the subject.

I do really like parts of this poem a lot. Some parts I am not so moved by though...To provide some more of my perspective, I will comment on different parts...

She loses herself in the rocking

Of the corner where she sways

All bundled in this haven

Safely forgetting away the days

My favorite is the last line. I think the word "Safely" could be replaced by something else. I cant come up with a calming yet sharp word though.. Maybe "cautiously" or "vigilantly" ? I wish the first line was constructed differently...maybe similar to the second line's format: "In the rocking she loses herself"  Also,usage of both "rocking" and "swaying" are a bit redundant.

To shut away all that is

The life the love the pain

For sometimes it is all too much

And the wish is for life to wane

Again my favorite line is the last one. I can relate to the general concept but I wish in the second verse you didn't use the word "life". with the love and pain, you are referring to life but using the word makes it simpler and less "magical".

Just vanish from existence

Even if only for a while

To not go on pretending

Or hiding behind that smile

I love this part... It is pure and the words you have utilized are serene. I would like the line 2 as: "even just for a while"

As every now and then

What just is must be sown

Taking stock of all around

The good the bad the grown

This is ok but I could do without this whole stanza

For in this world of plenty

There is no time for such

So to the corner I must flee

                                             The corner which sees so much

Is the last line tabbed on purpose? If so, I like it. I like that you mentioned the "corner" here again, as well as in the first stanza.

Overall, I like the poem and think with small justifications, it will be even better!

I really liked your poem. Having struggled with depression myself, and having never been able to express it through any sort of writing, I found I could relate to a lot of the imagery in the poem. Thanks for having the courage to write that.

 You have explained how easy it is to hide away in the corner of one minds. "Of the corner where she sways," In that place in your mind you can pretend that everything around you doesn't exsist for that moment in time that you still away.  But we must come out and when we do we find that what we are trying to escape from is still there and we haven't really ran away. 

You've expressed so adequately how in this world where we seem to have everything; why should there be anyone who would want to escape it? Very nicely written.

Ruth El

 Overall I really enjoyed your poem.  The imagery is good.  I could actually see her in her corner rocking.  I don't have a problem with the word " Safely "  I think you should keep that one and change the next word to rocking.  I think it paints a better picture.

I have a problem in the last part with your change from third person to first person..  I think you have to choose one or the other and stick with it.  Personally I like the third person version with this poem best.    I also think you did well with the rhyme.  For the most part the rhtym is great and I would changer very little there.  Spelling seems to be spot on and I didn't find any grammatical errors that stood out.

I have to say, you have done a great job.  I enjoyed reading this very much