Thank you for the critique on Liberty, she is special to me and that was a hard piece to post for people to pick at. I am glad you broght up the point of how being the younger or older afects things. In a werid way thats where I was going. but the last line was more about how much I love her than the fact that she is younger. Thanks again for the critique!

Thank you for the critique Erik. I'm glad you liked it. I was wondering though, what did you mean by twencen? Twentieth century, or that it is insipid and ignorant of the realities of life? I've heard it can mean both, hopefully it is the former of the two, I was just curious. I'm glad you critiqued that piece for me, you seem very knowledgeable and intelligent, it wasn't fluff, I thought your critique was great, not because it was agreeable with my work, but because it seemed to be honest. Anyway, thanks again for the kind words.

Thanks for the critique Erik. I will be posting more shortly.
-pynguin

hey, erik--
i found 'vehicular homicide' and enjoyed the bejeezus out of it.
great job!
when i find the opportunity, i'll send you some specific feedback, but i wanted to let you know how much i enjoyed it. *thumbsup*

I am thinking it was a little of column A and a little of column B, probably leaning more towards the cynical dystopian future than the crash-and-burn present.

hi, erik--
you mention you've written a short story. i'm much more of a short story person than poet--i'd love to read it!
don't get me wrong, i'll read and enjoy (and maybe even write) poetry. i'm just no expert on structure and rhyme schemes, etc.
'coming after you' is a blast to read--i'm off to read more of your stuff.

Crossed one of your critiques today, on necrophilic flowers. If you haven't read A Rose For Emily, by Faulkner you should. It's on the internets, even.

Thank you for your comment! I hope to read more of your lyrics and possibly to hear one of these songs on the radio someday.

Thanks for the comment.

Thanks for the comment!