Very interesting format.  As a developer, I like it... it's certainly not something you see every day.  But I have to wonder how difficult it would be to understand for a non-programmer.  For example, some people have trouble grasping the concept of variables and assignment, and nobody who's not a programmer would understand the () function call convention (the first line).

I would also get rid of the dash after "book," just because it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the lines.  Since we're talking about code here anyway, it may imply subtraction (which I don't think is what you mean).

I think rhyming "class" with "pass" is a bit of a childish rhyme... maybe it's entire line of "just try to pass" that's giving me that feeling.  I'd change that line to something a little more nuanced, although I can't give you any concrete suggestions.  It's more of a gut feeling about it.

I like how you rhymed i=i+1 with "sad sigh."  To give it a solid rhyme, maybe you could try saying i=1+i, which isn't as obvious, but still works and will leave "i" at the end of the line for rhyme purposes.  But, I also like it as it is.

Very good stuff, and creative!

well, I'm not really a programmer, but I've dealt with programming (actioncript 2.0 for flash, anyways) and I understand most of it. I didn't know that about the () or even that you used "i" to rhyme with "sigh". That's neat!

This is incredibly creative! And it rhymes which is a huge plus in my book (from the guy who believes that all poetry should rhyme). It looks like you put a lot of effort into it, and a very clever title too! I just noticed that JUST now, wow. I definitely get the feeling of the poem...philosophy sucks (and I understand completely ).

Anyway, great poem and very creative!

 I am not a programer, but I did understand some of what was going on in this poem. I like it, I like the way it rhymes too. The only part I dont agree with is the ending, I feel it ends rather sharply. It does not seam as strong as the rest of the piece.

Thank you, Riah

Defintely an interesting format!  I didn't understand the references, mostly because I'm not a programmer, but thanks to the other critques, I was able to make sense of the coding. I liked it, though - and I can relate!  I'm an education major currently suffering through a course on how to properly give tests & perform assessments on the students. T_T

I think just on the difficulty and boredom factors alone, anyone can relate to your frustration & boredom.

 Interesting. I suggest a further exploration of this style.

It is nice to see an author trying new things in a world of poetry all-to-often caught up in the same, tired format and themes.

I would only add a deeper development of your theme, which, by the way, I can totally relate to.

 I think this is a very creative and clever concept to say the least.  One thing that particuarly stood out to me was the sort of (seemingly) unintended power of the "end" commands. It seems to give the poem a sort of "musical rest" in the middle and the end. I'm not sure if I could necessarily put my finger on what appealed to me about the "end" commands, but it elicited a sort of positive reaction as I read it

In addition, I particuarly liked how the poem seems to convey they difficulties of a protagonist attempting to address something like love or relationships with the cold rationality of a computer program. It sort of rings of that slightly autistic kid you'd go to high school with who just didn't understand that emotions and people aren't rational or logical. That kid would never quite realize why he wasn't cool, or why girls didn't like him and simply couldn't realize that the issue was that people don't behave like a computer. I'm sure this wasn't you're intention as the author, but it's what I kindof drew from it.

My only critisism is that I think the programmer jargon could stand to be toned down a bit. I took a class in high school in C, so I think I understand most of what you're getting at ,but it still seems to require the reader to know something about computers, which a lot of people don't. (Myself included.)  But, at the same time, you certainly don't need to dumb stuff down if you don't care to hit the layman audience.

Definately powerful for such a short piece.