hey Fainne, long time no see!! well great seeing you again, i just got back on scribophile after a long break... so wats up?

Hey! I wriote the second chapter of "A Thirst For Revenge"! Will you please read and critique it?? PLEASE! I've been trying to get it on here for months, but it kept saying I didn't have enough karma points!
Please read it!

How would one actually get their stories published??? Please write back....

I have no clue where she is!! Oh my... She was my first friend... *sob*

Hi Fainne Grant,

Thank you for the welcome. I look forward to reading your stories. I don't have any that are ready to be shared just yet but when I do, I welcome any suggestions for improvement you may have.

Thanks again and have a great writing day!

I write horror, young adult, and urban fantasy...or a combination of all three lol I pretty much stick to those genres too, but I also read anything that just looks interesting. I'm working on a chapter for something I'm writing right now and I'm going to post it for critique once it's done =/ What about you?

Hi Fainne! Thanks for the post-I'm glad I found this site, I've been looking for something along these lines for a while. Now I just need to write something new to put up =/

hello Fainne- I saw that on Amber Lynn's Per- Diventare work that you had critted chapters 1+5 so i compromised and did #3 just lettin ya know
also, I intend to rate and review your works, and I see that I get a little bonus for that too! cya L8R

So I was looking at some of the books you like and I was wondering if you like the Stephenie Meyer books and/or the His Dark Materials trilogy?

I've added it to my reading list! I look forward to reading it.

hey i have a cat named stormy too and a flute!

i just got ure mssg and im going to read it now, and if u dont mind would u mind reviewing my first upload: Destiny chapter 1: the treasure of a thousand kings

Hey, Fainne. Thanks for your critique on Sinclair's Story. There is a sequel that I have planned called Sinclair's Story 2.

Hello, Fainne. Are there any stories that you want to read of mine? You can comment on Sinclair's Story on my profile because I entered it in a contest and I cannot make any changes. You wanted to read the edited version! Here it is

Hello, what's up? Thatnks for telling me about the whole memberships thingy. lol. Max Theriot is my fav actor and he's sooo adorable!!!
w/b soon!

Hello, Fainne! Read My Boyfriend's A Vampire when you get the chance, vote and comment!

Hey, Fainne! I have edited some of Passions of A Tempted Kind of Angel for you. I will probably get the rest today or tomorrow.

Hello, Fainne! I have some of it edited for you if you want to read it!

Hey, you are welcome for your thanks on on my indepth critique. I will get to it later and I am currently editing and writing down the parts to Passions of a Formerly Love Struck Tempted Kind of Angel: Sinclair's Story.

Hello! I see you already know my very good friend Ariadne. She's pretty cool...
I read on your profile that you said you've reached your limit of five published works and you won't delete any of them...what do you mean by that exactly? Many people have more than five works published. I'm confused.

Hey Fainne
I would like to receive new works and such. You are welcome to send them to katdineen@yahoo.com. I will read and post back the same way I do here, by email. I have a basic membership too. What I do is I post my works, let it get 2-5 critiques (depending on how helpful they are) and then I copy the work and critiques to WORD, delete it from Scrib, and post a new one. Then I go edit my works and such if I feel the critiques have merit. Have a good day!

That would be great in segments. Yes, my boys are under 10, but I can skim over some of that, (hehe). Anyway, I truly appreciate your time in responding back to me, I'll be back later, time for supper here. Take care. - EFSage

Hey Fainne,
Thanks so much for the comments! I appreciate them. The "High" comments do refer to drug use, so yes - the high is preferable to the shadows - even with its costs - at least to an active addict. In recovery you learn that is a facade and an excuse to continue bad behavior, but I wrote this in early sobriety when the pain of what I had done to friends/family/myself (shadow) was still so great that ANYTHING - even what caused it - was preferable. I am going to go through and take out some of the "highs" though - I think you are right there. Thanks again! Keep writing!

Thank you for the Thoughtful input on my work! You managed to pinpoint the awkward parts that I couldn't quite see. Thanks so much!

Thank you for your review.
Ok, first "their lust for one another" is basically what the guy thought. But she was looking at the guy right by him. I, among others thought that. (well of course I did, since I'm the creator.) And each stanza has 10 syllables exact. But that's probably not what you mean though. Thanks for the review.

Thanks for the announcement of your poems and story. For now, I will get to critique them tonight or tomorrow morning.

This is going to be hard, because I don’t know the world situation, but here are a few tips.

There is a part, right after the prologue where you have one of the characters go “Its not fair to them”, in that passage you also mention “The dark side” and an “Offer”

I do not think you explain though;
1) What and why “it” is not fair to “them”
2) What it is that has a “Dark Side”
3) What the “Offer” was.


Its alright to have some things not explained, but when you have three things not explained in such rapid succession, it just makes it hard to follow what’s going on.

One way to fix it would be to change who is narrating the story. Have the narrator explain to us the situation, and thus be able to answer those three questions.

Hey Fainne! You had a couple of questions about Hearts and Minds--thought I'd clear them up, if possible. So, here we go--Naiosa was the one who screamed in the forrest (though she won't admit it), Kirrime is a country, and about Halan...he kind of has "magic powers", but that's because he's a twin. See, in the story, there hasn't been a set of twins in the world in a long, long time, and for some reason, Halan and Kassandra were born, twins. Hope that clears some stuff up!

ps--flute rocks

Hey, I am in 8th Grade too! I will promide to read your story!

Hey Fainne. Just joined your circle.

Fainne Grant,
The settings that were beautiful were beneficial to the storyline and to appeal to the readers. I hope that I informed you. That is my author's note in my book.

Hey-thanks for the critique, Fainne!! I really appreciate it!

Thnaks for your critique, Fainne. What do I need to simplify as a description in order to make it appealing, though?

Hello, Fainne Grant. You can come read Heart of Ice sometime today. Just click my name, scroll down from my profile to recently published works, you will see Heart of Ice. Though it is not finished, enjoy it and maybe you can become a fan. Welcome to the site and I hope to see your works sometime! Take care!