Good job! I haven't seen this movie since it was out in theaters but I'm wondering if any of the original people from that are in this or mentioned? DJ sounds familiar, but anyway...that's all besides the point (lol). This was really well-written for the most part. All I noticed were a few instances of tense confusion. Some present-tense parts sneaked in with the past-tense, which a majority of the story is written in.

She knew she shouldn't long for another man other than her fiancé, Zeke Criswell, but she couldn't help her feelings. Zeke's recent antics and the company he's been keeping with a specific Mu Gamma brother, Grant Clark, have been pushing Zade to her breaking point.

 

Where it says "the company he's been keeping" it should read "the company he'd been keeping" or "the company he had been keeping"...whichever you prefer. You got a lot of background information in one chapter without bogging it down, which is good. It was really easy to read through. The only problem I slightly had was keeping the characters straight, since some of them are mentioned but not seen and names are similar (Zeke and Zade-I love the latter name btw). But it wasn't a big deal. Your introductions were very natural, not forced like some authors' are when they're attempting to introduce a majority of their characters in one chapter.

          "I felt the rest of the school should know who the new names and faces of stepping are." Sly released Zade, and faced his rival. On more than one front, they had been in competition. Zade was just the most valuable prize.

 

I really like the bolded phrase-it speaks a lot about the history between Zeke and Sly without saying too much. The quote kind of confused me though, did you mean: "I felt the rest of the school should know who the new names and faces stepping are" or "I felt the rest of the school should know who the new names and faces of -insert frat's name here- are." The way it's written now doesn't make sense. And the last thing I noticed was that you have some words hyphenated that aren't supposed to be. I don't know if this was a formatting problem or you just didn't notice, but for example:

"It's your choice. But you're going to have to get used to this, if we're go- ing to get married."

I just thought I would point that out since there's a few times that occurs. But I wasn't sure if there was a reason for this? Anyway, aside from those few minor mistakes, everything else looks good. It held my interest and I would definitely be interested in seeing where the plot goes from here.

Hopefully it would give him the avenue to push Zade out of his mind. But true to her soror name, Zade refused to stray too far from his thoughts.

I love those last two sentences. They really wrap up the chapter nicely and I like how they relate back to Zade's soror name. The connection is really natural and it works well. Overall, good job. I hope I helped.