Hi! Welcome to Scribophile, and thank you for your critique of QSS. Trust me, there IS a twist, and one that I hope will be unexpected. But, I can't reveal too much just yet. Suffice to say, it's not Thomas. ..

I'm already planning to go back sometime this weekend to add more descriptions to the city's sights and sounds, and the rest I will do when it's time to edit.

Thanks again! Have fun on here! It's a little quieter than usual due to NaNoWriMo...