Hans, I stand corrected on the knowledge existent on Neanderthals, but living in America where almost half the population doesn't believe in evolution, this knowledge base is not in the mainstream. I need to keep up with my non-medical science reading!

Doctor Wayne

Thanks!

I think its a refreshing change from my previous "Pouty Kewpie" look

PUt it on my reading list--sounds like great fun!

Many thanks, Hans~! Egypt was too hot, too dusty, too everything. Ten days was too long to be there. Not for me. Happy to be home and back on Scrib!

Hi thanks for reading my story. I appreciate the feedback and I will try to work on your suggestions. Cheers.

Guilty as charged.

Good point about gore vs. blood. I initially had "blood" but I keep feeling like I've used it too much.

Yes, I agree that the more I think about it, the less importance gender seems to have. I know plenty of people of both sexes who'd be willing to pay for a decent conversation.

I will stick with it and see what happens. Thanks again

Thank you, Hans. I value your opinion very much and you've made some excellent points. I think I might actually edit that one

Hi: Not much you can do about people being able to follow single chapters. Everyone has the same problem. Hopefully some people will follow your entire story.
As far as contractions go... it is your book. If you decide to make changes this type of change can be easily made made whenever you want... if you want.
cheers
Bryce

"I see the lady has reduced her story from 57253 words to 24531 words.

Someone is not getting the message."

No shit, i'm the only person sending that message. Talk to her, explain why she should trim it down, THEN complain about it.