What Fell From Heaven, Chapter 2: Controlled Crash
novel, fantasy, science fiction
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Jun. 15, 2008, 4:40amWord Count:
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Chapter Description
As the fiery object descends to the ocean, a lone soul struggles to save the crew.
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They had obviously been the first thing to hit the wall when the
impact occurred. Tsorach grimaced and tried to pry open the
maintenance panel located on the rail's underside. The door had
warped, though, and try as he might, he could not get it open. He
pulled a multi-utility tool from his belt and tried again which
only resulted in him breaking off the time of the tool's blade.
Wonderful, he thought. He cast about for another plan. There had to be a way he could get out of here. He ran his hands over the tools on his belt. Several screw drivers and a wrench were there. Nothing I can really use against this.
He began pacing in frustration. He could feel the energy building in him. He discharged little bolts into the walls around him, trying to work out his anger. He needed to keep his head clear.
Or maybe that anger was the answer. Tsorach turned to the wall and kneeled down. He held out his right hand, and channelled a terrific burst of energy straight into the wall. It was slow going, but the wall did melt under the sustained barrage. After several minutes he had a hole large enough to fit his toes into. He continued working his way up the floor, burning toe- and hand-holds into the bridge of the Nekhual. The captain will have my head for this, he thought.
Channelling that much electricity took a toll on Tsorach. He was not an overly large example of The People, nor was he imbued with stamina. He had to climb back down to the walls often to rest.
As he worked his way up the floor, a new worry began to gnaw at Tsorach's mind. The door to the bridge was usually just an opening archway. During emergencies, however, a pair of electricity resistant blast doors slid shut to protect Nekhual's nervous system. If those had closed, he was as good as dead.
When he finally got to the doors, he was relieved to find that the blast doors had not completely closed. The power must've gone down right in the middle of them closing. He squeezed through the gap, collapsing onto the doors to regroup. Just a bit more, then I'll sleep in my hibernation pod.
As he burned his way slowly up the corridor, he tried to think of what could have caused the power loss. There was a plethora of things that could have triggered such massive failures. He automatically ruled out the worst-case scenario. The hibernation pods' life support panels all glowed, meaning that they had gone into individual mode. At least they'll keep until I figure out what's wrong. Checking for loose wiring or leaks in the hull were his first two priorities. Both would be time consuming, but they were the easiest problems to fix.
After several hours of hard work, Tsorach finally reached his hibernation pod. He flopped in it and fell asleep without a second thought.



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i think you switched the character's point of view well. Most writers have a problem with mixing character's personalities around when they write from multiple point-of-views. I know i have that problem. You manage to keep the two personalities distict and unique. Hopefully you can manage to keep them apart throughout the course of the story.
I like the way you describe the makings of the ship and the dynamics behind the systems. As a ship engineer, I can appreciate the effort to explain the workings of such things. Its so much easier to simply say "it works because it just does", and too many people do that. Its good to see you're willing to take that extra step.
It think you added an extra word at the end there.
other than that, i have nothing else to add to this chapter. well done. Keep up the great work.