hi, joshua--
oh, it struck a nerve, all right!
i hope my blathering made sense, and that you found some useful nuggets in all that. i do tend to go on when i'm excited.
thanks again for writing!! excellent story. seriously.

Hey Joshua: Glad you found my comments helpful. And you're right - there are men who are more sensitive. I know one who's a very dear friend. Good luck with your writing.

hi, joshua--
thanks for your comments! i agree about that third sentence not fitting the narrator's voice....must change that. i appreciate you reading and commenting.

Thanks, man.

Hey, That was a very useful and lucid critique, and I really appreciated the fact that you not only pointed out the problems but you also offered valid sample solutions which gave me a better idea of how to solve them. Thanks a lot

You're right, "wondrous joy" is a bit verbose. I'll fix that! Thanks!

Thanks for the critique, my friend. Hopefully the next half, once I get enough karma points to post it, will help resolve some of the issues you mentioned. Thanks again!

I'd like to say thank you for the critique on "Twitch". I have been having a lot of trouble with that one and your thougts were helpful because they paralleled my own and reinforced my instinct. you mentioned an author I've never run into before, are there any works by this person you would recommend?

Hi Joshua! Thanks so much for the kind critique! I fixed the spelling error, and when I reread the paragraph you mentioned, I saw exactly what you were saying and tweaked it. Many thanks for the excellent suggestion, and for your time as well!

You are very welcome! Glad i could help. I see you posted another story. I will have to go check it out

Thanks for the critique! I really appreciate it.

You're critiques are far too kind. I'm not complaining. Just saying. I was so glad to see you on this site. Who knew, two years ago, that we'd be working on writing together again. Crazy thing, this internet, connecting people across the globe. Should I be ashamed to say that I missed someone I've never met? Crazy, isn't it. Anyway...I'll finish my critique for Pop Pop ASAP, but I think my insomnia is ending tonight. I'm going to crash.

Thanks for your comments on my last June Challenge chapter I'm glad you enjoyed the stories. Feel free to take a look at the earlier chapters and let me know what you think. June was a long month...

Thanks for the critique! =D Your impressions of the chapter were very helpful.

I'm glad to hear you felt the 'military' career of Karl was accurate and not boring. I must confess, I did a lot of research on the net to make it believable. I'm not a military buff and doing that research was torture for me, glad to see it paid off.

Hey, I love your book selection. Except for Catcher in the Rye. That was my husbands favorite. Needless to say, he's not my favorite, so I can't like that book.

Greetings Joshua,

Welcome to Scribophile!

-Ben

Come to the dark side with me. Good to see you. I can't wait to read some of your work, old or new. Welcome, old friend.

hi, joshua--
welcome!