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On Deliverance, by Kajikawa Niigata: Thanks for the comments guys, I made a few adjustments based on
your suggestions.
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On Deliverance, by Kajikawa Niigata: Glad you enjoyed it! You are probably right, the ending is
rather abrupt, and I actually wrote another two pages, with a
poli... » Read more...
On Oil and Water, by Jase Jayne: Hi. I like this a lot, but I think you need to read it aloud to
yourself. If you do that - imagine you were giving it as a sp... » Read more...
On The Earthlings, Chapter 1: In Which Maya Is Embarrassed About Her Hair, by Luray Cooper: I think this is actually quite cleverly done and fun. It's quite
a good concept - a teen romance-type drama set in a spac... » Read more...
On Brazeria, by Jack McFie: So I just read this whole thing - and I am very confused. Is
this a dream you had? It's not really a story, it's eith... » Read more...
On The Ottoman, by Cameron Wiles: This story is like something from another world to me, living in
the UK.
First off, I had to look up what an ottoman is...
ht... » Read more...
On Aberration, by Dylan Moody: This didn't really grip me from the start and continued to
trouble me with bad phrasing. I didn't really understand w... » Read more...