Kajikawa Niigata, you have done it again! I have seen you creative ways of pioneering the arts of science fiction at its truest tidbit of potential! This was a fantastic way to start off the story! But  I have a question: Are your works supposed to be this short? I am not complaining though, because as you, the author, you would have to be the judge of how short or how long your ideas are in you idea of a novel. You are the god of your novel and you govern what goes on in your novel, work, short story or whatever. Anyway, I wish to hear more of your science fiction to critique on how good it is! I wish to hear from you soon. But for right now, I will say goodbye!

I am completely blown away by this.  It was short and simple yet extremely powerful.  The fact that you made something as complex as the creation of the universe into something as simple as a child with a ball talking to an adult hypnotizes me.  It compels me to read on.  Sadly, there isn't much more for me to read.  I definitely look forward to reading more of your work.  This must be one of the single most beautiful yet simple things that I have read as far as something as mystical as this imagery is.  Please keep up the good work so that people like me can enjoy it.

Wow. This is really good work. I'm glad I decided to give in to my better judgment and read a piece of science fiction. This is a really cool concept. It reminds me of the ending in Men In Black. When the giant alien rolls the marble of a galaxy into a bag. I have oft wondered about that ending and it's nice to see a similar concept being elaborated upon. My strong point has never been imagination. So it is really nice for a writer to paint a picture such as this for those who do not imagine things well. I may be creative, but as far as science fiction goes, I am always left at a loss when attempting to write something in this genre. So kudos my friend for doing so well with such a difficult genre. I look forward to reading more in this series of writings. Good work. Keep it up. I will definitely be looking in to your other works to see what else you have written. I hope it's all this good.

It is truly amazing how the few words on this page can bear so much depth.  I enjoy the fact that you like to keep it simple, with very little filler. Reading the text to it is almost like peering through a crystal clear glass into the story itself.

To me it seems like the perfect build up to the story (according to your synopsis) that you want to convey.  Keep it up, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it.

 Well written.  It is simple, short, to the point.  It is also powerful and understandable.  In many cases, short works do not carry much weight or longevity, yours does both.  It is captivating.  It draws the reader into without thought.  It is unexpected and high as are the works of Science fiction, yet it is something almost religious.  It is deep and yet given in ease to the masses.I enjoyed this work.  It was brilliantly written and divised.  Well done sir.