Hi Kat,

Thanks for the critique--good catches on those missing and misspelled words. I've only read over that story a dozen times or so and never even saw them. I too am a Pagan, so what do I know about gods and demons?

Thanks, too, for your advice.

~Blessings

i am not going to publish anything on this site for a while, as i have reached my basic membership limit of 5 works. however, if you want to recieve any continuations, or see new works, email me (email's on my profile) and lemme know !! thanks, ~Fainne

thanks so much for the critique on lost sister! yes, i see how inserting the 'a' would make it flow a little easier. thanks again!!!
~Fainne
ps: check out my other works and let me know what you think!!!

Yea spelling is NOT my strong point, one of the resons I joined Scribophile. Thanks for the words of help!

Hi Kathleen,

Thank you for the crtique and I am pleased you enjoyed the story. The Succubus was based on a real person--a former fiancee who actually did suck the life from me and left me an empty shell for many years. But, she made a perfect Succubus for the story.

Thank you for your comment. I like knowing that other people understand that it is hard to write something that personal and from the heart. I am sorry for the people who had to experience this but it is also a very good life lesson.

Hello! When you have time please read, The Boys of Summer -and tell me what you think.

Kathleen,

Thank you for the message. I will read over the rest of that story and let you know what I think. Have also posted one short story so far--a dream/horror piece.

Actually I haven't been really involved in script frenzy. When I saw the name I had assumed it was a circle for screenplay writers.

hey can you give my poem a rank so i can put another one up right now!

Hey! I got one work so far! Check it out tell me what you think in your critique!

Hey, just to say that I have published something now.

As for the karma-raising, that was my main goal, but I didn't want to say anything untrue just to gain karma. I look forward to browsing your other work.

Thanks for the critique on Dark Within. I think your absolutely right. I took some time away from the piece even after making changes and came to that conclusion as well. I don’t know why I didn’t SEE that in the first place. This was one of my first works and I feel I’ve come along way. Your dead on though -I’ve already started making changes and will post them soon. I’d really love if you’d give the story another shot after I’m done and tell me your honest opinion. Thanks again!

Hi. Thanks for your thoughts on my poem. You raised a good point there. I might go back and make a slight change. I read a couple of your poems and really enjoyed them. Good work.

Don't think twice about it. I love Mere Words, it had me from the first line.

I almost forgot, I edited the parts you wanted for you!

Try to read the first page all the way to the sixth. Then you will understand the whole entire story.

Hello, Kathleen. All of your questions will be answered and the how do I love thee quote will be included in an author's quote and many other reasons why I put some stuff in here. I hope you rate my other parts a four out of ive or five!

Thanks for the review! Probably a good point on putting up a disclaimer, I appreciate the tip.

Thanks for the review! Reguarding the publication, I just entered that particular poem to the Americanpoetry.com and they wanted to publish it... so I really couldnt give you any tips.. It just happened.

But yes, I actually had the title fonts larger and bold to keep the poems seperated, but when I copied, pasted and posted it, the fonts turned out all the same... Frustrating...

In case you are still curious, I have just posted some poetry.

Hello, Kathleen. Wanna read my works today. Click my name, scroll down to recently publsihed works, you will see, Heart of Ice. Tell me what you think about it, okay? I hope that you enjoy it and also I want to publish that work sometime soon, so I am trying to do my best on doing it! Take care!

I love vampires! or vampyres, however you wish to put it (to each their own, right?). I hear a lot about the rhyme of "pain" and "again", but I put it in there not so much for forcing it, though you might be right, but if you read a lot of older poems like with Robert Frost or famous poets like that, they'll do that a lot. Being a big person for rhyming, I should be just as offset by that as you, but I dunno, I felt like it was ok. You know, though, if people keep sayin' stuff about it, maybe I should change it. Afterall, that's the idea of critiques, right? Thanks a ton for the critique! I'm glad you liked the poem!

and hey, congratulations on completing nanowrimo!! i made my first attempt in november, and still have so much work left to do on the novel. *sigh*

hi, kathleen--
thanks so much for the encouraging review!
i admit to an insecurity when it comes to attempting poetry, but trying to develop that distilled, imagery-rich facility with language is so important in all writing, isn't it?
i sincerely appreciate your comments--thanks for the feedback!