oh... you like to rhyme ;o)  haha!  just kidding, it's great.  and thanks for the two great reviews. but no, back to your poem:

i know what it's like to move.  i've done it.... five times i guess??  i'm not really sure, but i know what you talk about, moving into a new home, some where that someone else has lived in.  even if the house is empty you always feel so.... weird.  I get that way when i go into hotel rooms... the first thought in my mind is "i wonder how many people have had sex in the bed i'm about to sleep in..."  but of course, that's just me.  (sorry if i offended you just then.  not my intention)

anyways, no, i know exactly how you feel.  I'd just try to show more and tell less.  Make the poem a little tighter, take out some of the "extra" words (all the it, the, this)  It'll make the poem flow better and feel more... cold, i guess.  That's what i think you're going for.  I picture you sitting a room, all alone.  Cold blue shadows on the empty white walls.  no furniture (except the cardboard kind of course ;o) 

i like it though.  and i'll look forward to seeing more of your work. 

Keep up the good work!

(ps, sorry for my poor grammar.  i dont like to capitilize my words 99% of the time. haha ;o)  i also suck at spelling.)

 Good Job Kay. I think this is something that several people can connect with. My critique has to do with rhyme scheme. I think the poem might be improved (or might not) if there wasn't an unproportional amount of lines that end with the "ohs" sound.

Here is your rhyme scheme aa bbbb cc dd bb aa. You see how close it is to being balanced? If you could make your rhyme scheme    aa bbbb cccc aa, it would have a nicer balance to it or a simple aa bb cc dd etc. would be fine as well, though i prefer the former. Maybe see what you can do to balance that rhyme scheme out for us?

 Kay, I am new here and your's is the first work I have read.  I have always greatly admired a writer penning a poem as I do not have it in me.  Your poem is beautiful and touching.  I have moved 17 times and that is exactly the way I have felt almost every time.  Crying and feeling as if I will die to what has been left behind.  It is surely the loneliness feeling.  Thank you for sharing!

PK

My name is Joey and I enjoyed reading the selection posted above entitled, "Alone" written by Kay More, here on Scribophile. I decided to read this poem because I don't believe I have read any of Kay More's works here on Scribophile before. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. You did a very good job Kay More. I agree with P.K.  about he rhyming scheme, however. The meter wasn't atrocious, but it could be better. All in all I really liked it, it was easy to read. I related it to it well enough. And the emotion that was portrayed was quite strong I felt. I look forward to reading more of your pieces. I hope they are all this good. Keep up the good work.

 Very nice, dark, grey and cold but you convey your message loud and clear well written.

Kay, there is a clear sense of sadness and aloneness in this poem.  Both of which are relatable. Few people really enjoy  moving, especially when ownership is not part of the event. It is cumbersome. It is a lot of drudge work and along with all of that... not everything moves with us when we move. I think you demonstrated this final point quite well. Your new place was lacking a part of you that you had left behind...while it also held ghosts --so to speak--of previous occupants.

I find your work on this piece to be well done. I was not distracted by the rhyme scheme.

Louise