thanks, kirsten--i'm happy you enjoyed the zombie story! i agree that the characters could use some fleshing out (heh), and plan to work on that after november.
i appreciate your critique.

cool! hey, where'd it go?? (blindsided)

Kirsten,

Just a friendly suggestion. If you plan on leaving a critique, please leave something constructive, rather than a rant.

To my understanding, the purpose of this website is for us build up one another in our writing, and that is difficult to do when we give one another bitter rants with no purpose to them.

That said, thanks for taking a look, and know that I am currently doing a LOT of revising .

-Strider212

Thank you for your kind comments!

Actually, I haven't seen What's Eating Gilbert Grape. It's on my list, definitely.

Kirsten, if you don't like someone's work or have suggestions, please try to have some manners. We are all here to receive helpful feedback on our work, and we can all be mature about it. your critique and your comment on my latest post here were just mean, to the point where I didn't even think it was worth it to read them all the way through. If someone can't handle themselves maturely, I don't really care what they have to say.

i just doublechecked and i can't believe i neglected to respond to your critique, kirsten. thppt on me!
i just reread your comments, and am gratified you really 'got' the point of my 'return' story. thank you for your helpful suggestions regarding the confusing spots, and your encouragement for the spots you felt i wrote well. you rock!!

It's Friday. Post 'em if you got 'em.

-Ben

Reading your critiques is like watching an erotic exchange. I love it. They may not always make the most sense , but they are always a good ride .

Hey Kirsten! Thanks so much for you great critique on my work. It is very helpful and I love this place. Now I'm off to go check out your personal website and probably add them to mine!

Hello Kirsten,
Just a reminder to critique two stories from the FFFF circle (What I Know by Louisa should be one of them) and then post that you've done it on the forum. You have until Friday.
Thanks,
-Ben

Thank you very much for your critique!

In regards to The Late Night Movie Show

HEHE

See I have already changed the title

Louisa

In regards to The Late Night Picture Show

Thanks, Kirsten. That was cool.

I'll shoot this back your way when I write more...maybe we can play tag and keep writing on this to help us practice characterization.

Only if you want to.

Louisa

hi, kirsten--
thanks for your feedback on my bear attack story.
some of the questions you raised i tried to answer in the story, but you're not the only person who's read it who felt they weren't quite clear enough. must fix that!
i appreciate all your suggestions, and will keep them in mind for edits. thank you!

thank you for your critique of guilt. You are completely right about parts of it not making sense. I will take what you said into consideration for future drafts.
~Renea

Hello Kristen,

I feel bad because you've really been contributing to FFF, but you kind of missed the glory days when it worked really well. So, just for you, I'm trying to bring them back. Check out my recent forum post for details and I hope you'll join us in the furious action.

-Ben

thanks for the comment. i'm glad you enjoyed the story, and congratulations on the june contest!

Hey I was just wondering what you and Terri model for?

Hello Kirsten, I like your About Me. Don't worry - I'm not a judging person ^.^ Not everyone in the world is prejudiced. I like your work, and can't wait to see more. I had a girlfriend too for a while. Pity your Aunt doesn't understand? My parents understood and accepted me first shot. If anything, they poke fun at me. On camping trips, it's usually "One friend. No boys. And no girlfriends." ;P Anyway. Hope to see more from you soon.

Hi Kirsten,

Thanks so much for your review of my poem, and sorry it took me so long to thank you for it! I'm not even sure if you remember critiquing it anymore.

Hey! I wriote the first and second chapter of "A Thirst For Revenge"! Will you please read and critique it?? PLEASE! I've been trying to get it on here for months, but it kept saying I didn't have enough karma points!
Please read it!

Thank you for critiquing my poem XD. I will be sure to read one of yours an tell you what I think!

Thanks so much for the feedback. The point about the colored notebooks makes sense. Guess I need to focus on what a reader looks for in an article next time.

i think i was here for about a week before i became accustomed to the layout and karma system.
i'm adding your chapter to my reading list pronto--thanks for the heads up.
(and good luck in the contest! i'm glad you entered. )

hi, kirsten--
thanks so much for your critique of my 'dancing with mrs brown' story! your comments are helpful, indeed, and i'll be sure to refer to them when i make my edits.
i look forward to reading your work--please let me know when you post.
welcome to scribophile!

Welcome to scribophile!