laos! my man!
haven't seen you around for a little while...what're you up to? getting any writing done?

Hello Laos/Dominic,

I'm tweaking the FFF to make it more rigorous. Check out my recent forum post for more info. We would love to have you come along.

-Ben

congrats on critiquer of the month ( :

I really like your writing from what I've read so far. Please keep adding more stories!

Thanks for the critique on The Beast. Its meant to be like a camp fire story, that's why its so vague. but you're right, i should work on it more. thanks for the suggestions!

hey, dude! congratulations on being announced Supremo Critiquer Fantastico for June!!

Congrats on your Super Critiquer title

hey, laos--
thanks for the stupendous critique! this is what i'm talkin' about.
i appreciate you taking such time and care with my chapter, giving it to me straight.
i see what you mean about the 'lone man' being a distraction, and you've convinced me. he'd do better to show up a little later, present more as a looming threat on the horizon rather than sitting right in the boy's lap at the outset.
i'll be referring back to your other suggestions as well, as i rework. so much to do!
thanks again--so much!

Not a problem man. keep pumping out those stories.

gehee! thanks for the birthday wishes, laos!

hi, laos--
i just read your critique of william craig's contest chapter and wanted to thank you. your explanations for your suggestions opened up several ideas in my little head, and i'm inspired to run off to start fixing my chapter (which has similar choppy scene jumps)!
you are wise, laos-san.

Thanks for the critique Laos. I'll be reviewing the piece based on your feedback.

ha! thanks for reading and commenting on my shorties, laos.
i appreciate your suggestions, and have no doubts you're absolutely correct--will save them for my edits. you rock!

hi, laos--
thanks for your comment on my dead steve story! i'm so glad you enjoyed it.
and thanks, too, for adding me to your favorites list. *blush*
i'm off to read 'mineral'!

thanks for the commetn on my poem. The main focus is not the mother actually. It is directed towards my ex friend and "friends" who caused my depression. It just came to me in that form. Moreover, in my minmd it came from a preschooler or young age like that. I don't know why, my mind is strange. But anyways, thank you.