thanks for the critique! yes, i see whta you mean about the confusing and unexplained elements of the story, and i am thinking hard about how i can fix that hole. this work still needs some major work (for instance, writing past the prologue ) but if you could, feel free to check out my other works, which have a little more detail about the characters and things are more explained plus, i have 1 poem if you like poetry!! thanks again