Hello! When you have time please read, The Boys of Summer -and tell me what you think.

Hi, Matthew. I would like to thank you for your help on my original story Touched By Temptation, I will publish another story for you as soon as possible and will contact you when I have a part of it done. Bye friend. Oh, Happy birthday for March 26th.

Hey, Matthew! You know the story, Touched By Temptation? Well, about that I had reworked the story for you and renamed it "Black Heart of Deceit". Check it sometime soon!

Once again thanks for the critique! I rewrote the poem so check it out if you have time.
Thanks!

Hey,
Great idea on making my free write into a poem!
Thanks!

Hey, I just wanted to say thanks for your critique. Now that you mention it, I do want to go back and edit that one part. It's not that Paul's a pansy or anything (I actually always pictures him has big and somewhat intimidating), it's mostly that when it comes to Jamie, it's easy for Jen to break out into hysterics. Paul, not being very well equiped to handle hysterical women, just tries to get her to calm down as fast as possible, even if he doesn't realize it's not working, haha.

I have published a new book chapter on my profile! It is Chapter 0: Preface My Broken Soul. Go and read it!

Hey, Matthew? Did you at some chance read my work and give it a review? Because I checked for one recently published work and it had 2 stars out of 5 this morning. I feel like I am at the end of my rope. I need some help here, friend. I haven't even heard of you in a long time. What are you doing?

Read my most recently published works on my profile! I have a new story for you!

That sounds good! Read all of my works even Lost Souls of Forever Romance and the newly finished short story Heart Break and tell me what you think about them!

Hey,
Maybe you can help me out more a bit on my books I'm trying to publish, maybe as a co-author if possible. Also, go read Lost Souls of Forever Romance!

I have edited and finished Heart Break. Go back and read it!

Dear Matt,
Check all over your profile, because there I a surprise I sent you....

that is pretty funny!

Dear Matthew,

Thank you for your insight on my poems. It is an honor to have inspire you and anyone for that matter. I truely feel that you are on the right path, so don't ever let anyone tell you differnt.
I've never really cared for religion much after being in so much truma in my youth. And I've always been some what of a 'bad boy.' But I've always kept in mind, that no matter what happens to me, or what people think of me, I ALWAYS believed that God will see me through anything!!!!

You are a remarkable young man, and may the Lord always be with you. ALWAYS!!!

With Love and Respect,
David

Matthew,

Thanks for your feedback. I feel like the fourth stanza is a bit informal and really doesn't fit within the confines of the piece...if you have a chance read it again without that stanza and tell me your thoughts. I feel like the first two stanzas and the last one fit well together, but you're right the MTV stanza is more of a framework of idea than it is polished product.

The last stanza is serious from the point of view of the speaker in the piece. These is how he feels and while it is a shift from political to business, I tried to make them fit.

Anyways thank you so much again. It was greatly appreciated. Please let me know if you give it a second read.

My works do go together, actually. Carmine Being and The Midnight Rose Chapters 1 and 6, I posted 6 because I am not going to do chapters for that novel in awhile. Chapter six says Preview of Carmine Being and The Midnight Rose. Touched By Temptation and Heart Break are both separate stories.

I thank you for your comment on Heart Break, friend! I haven't had feedback in about a week. Other works by me haven't been feebacked yet so be sure to read them as soon as possible!

Thanks again for your comments. I really appreciate them. I am still struggling with that script. It is so hard when I can't say THIS IS RIGHT SO DO IT THIS WAY. I know I don't have to make a choice, but it makes it easier to write about. You are right about Andy,I need to add him as a character not just someone who is there.
Anyways your comments really help, thanks!

I was trying to point out the first three lines that I liked that you wrote. Remember, to read my works (Click on Ariadne President when you see it on my scratchpad) and if you like them, become a fan.

In case you read my works (Go to my profile or click on my name, Ariadne President) go to recently published works and read them, and if you like become a fan of me and please critique. I haven't gotten feedback for almost a week.

P.S. I don't tell everyone my age if that is what you are asking. Its private...

Sounds good!

Thank you for your comment! I really appreciate the critiques.