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On Flicker, by Christine C: Faith is fleeting; it is the metaphor; it is the flame
and the dusk that dims things I know for certain to
exist.
that is so ... » Read more...
On Plain Jane, by Kay Tor: get work
you have good structure and the rhymes were on point
keep up the great work !
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On Becoming 1 of 1, by bradhimself: awesome poem very real
few typos in there
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On our country is at war, by missunderstood: great poem, love to hear what people say about the war and its
impact
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On nice to meet you anyway, by Lauren Morton-Farmer: like the drinking/romance theme
pretty cool
i think in the gin one - the cups should be glass instead of
plastic... your drin... » Read more...
On Cold Sun, by Royce Utley:
sun shown down on me.
Yet it
filled me with no warmth, against the chill air.
decent poem, i know wher... » Read more...
On When Courage Breeds Fear, by Ezra Fortune: this poem is awesome, like how you get into another
persons perspective. i think you should remove all the commas at
th... » Read more...
On Inner Inferno Killing the Firefighters of My Heart, by Annelise Garner: great poem i liked it,
i m not much of a critiquer so i dont know what points of it
were bad or need working on
keep wr... » Read more...
On Withdraws of lost love, by LaurenB45: awesome poem, very powerful and i could identify with a
lot of those feelings myself. kudos
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On Reality Bites, by Debbie Kerr: there is beauty in that honesty
and honestly i find written beautifully
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On Falafel Philosophy, by Mandi:
I'm sorry for my sibilance
that line is pretty genius. and by the way you should at least
try a falafel, i mean their w... » Read more...
On The Day Imagination Died, by Inkblot Scribe: yeh, I like the poem a lot , i think you should use whatever
structure you want. people get to caught up in traditional
struc... » Read more...
On Requiem for a Microbial Armada, by Bob Onnie: i really enoyed this poem and i thought it was pretty
good. i m not really going to tell you about structural use of
he... » Read more...