On A Missing Dimension, by Dear Daisy: This is one of my favorite poems now. I was able to tell the rhythm immediately, which is something that doesn't happen o... » Read more...

On The Dude On The Fridge, by brothafett: I agree. It was a bit hard for me to find the rhythm, also. The only other thing that struck me as a bit weird was "For her s... » Read more...

On What Matters Most to Me, by The Midnight Writer: Hello, I like your style or writing. Above that, you seem to be very informed with what goes on in our world. I know that thi... » Read more...

On When Being a Vampire Doesn't Suck, by T.G.Santini: Hah, that would be horrible. I remember when when bent my teeth when I was little. I'm a wimp when it comes to pain so it... » Read more...

On Euology to my iPod, by Eric Marxer: You made my day with this eulogy and I hank you for it. Isn't it horrible when iPods die? My sympathies, if yours did act... » Read more...

On Lessons from Elijah, Chapter 1: Starving Artists, by Mandi: I really, really liked it. The Santa Clause comparison is my favorite part. I know this isn't going to be a good critique... » Read more...

On Pears, by Traci S: I liked it even more the second time I read it! You're a great writer. There's not much to say, not much at all. I kn... » Read more...

On Pears, by Traci S:  I really liked it. Though it wasn't as funny as I expected, it was still very good. It did take me the entire first... » Read more...

On A Woman's Loss, by Angel w o Wings:  I really liked it, and I know this might sound annoying, but I couldn't find anything that I think I would do ... » Read more...

On Crossing Over, by browneyes:  Nicely done, nicely done. I did find a few things that I thought could be different, but don't have to be. Just hea... » Read more...

On In a Crowded Room, by Jenny: Ha, I really liked it. Such a short poem with a great plot. ... » Read more...

On A Heart of Ice, Part 5, by Ariadne President: Hello! The one thing that I think is most prominent about this chapter is the style you used to write it. I truly think that ... » Read more...

On Heart Break, by Ariadne President: I really enjoyed reading this! Yes, I did find a few places that my style would convince me to write differently, but are jus... » Read more...

On The War Wound, by Lee Viliesis: Your story captured me with the first sentence. I really liked how you described the characters and their actions. It struck ... » Read more...

On A Boy's Destiny, by C. Trevino: Your intro is quite good, but I think it might be better if you stopped the repetition of the words "he" and"his" just a bit ... » Read more...

On Lighter Than, by Keith Arsenault: I really liked it! My favorite part is the line, "calming chaos awaiting". Such sweet music to my ears! Or should that be "fo... » Read more...

On Boomerang, by Bob Onnie: I kind of liked it. It was fun to read! I'm sorry I don't have anything else to say right now, my "thinking cap" is t... » Read more...

On Requiem for a Microbial Armada, by Bob Onnie: As many others have stated, it's very light and easy to read. It made my whole week, reading those lines. The rhyme schem... » Read more...