Hi My Little Nightmare =)

This is a very nice little poem you have here. Since it's so short there's obviously not much for me to critique, but I do have a few suggestions for you.

Our minds melt under the pressure

I stumbled on this line. The rhythm it has doesn't fit in very well with the other lines in its stanza - try shuffling the words around or substituting with synonyms, and read it aloud to yourself to see what sounds best.

The noise at night doesn't make any sense
We see rainbows on the ground
You slowly lose all confidence
As it absorbs the sound

Mainly it's the second and fourth lines of this stanza that are throwing me off - they don't seem quite long enough to keep up the rhythm that you've established throughout the rest of your piece, and it was a bit jarring to read because it felt very abrupt. This can be easily fixed by adding a few words to each until it has a similar flow to the others.

Overall, nicely done =) I loved the images you were creating and the emotions you convey to your reader. Thanks for the read and best of luck with your future works.

Wow, excellent job, my little nightmare!    This was a very well-written poem.  The imagery is beautiful.  I love the lines

We see rainbows on the ground

and

Phases of emotional metamorphosis.

...They're brilliant!

Your rhyming is also very good.  Most rhymed poetry that I read I dislike because the rhyme sounds forced, but this is not the case at all here; it sounds very natural and in most cases adds to the flow.

In some places, the deletion of a word may be conducive to a smoother flow, such as in the second line in the second stanza, "the," and in the fourth line "such" (although you could add "that").

Entranced by sounds so strange and grim

Our minds melt under pressure

You want to go out on a limb

It tells us that there is no cure

In the first line of the third stanza, deleting "any" and breaking the contraction into "does not" might help too.  ("The noise at night does not make sense.")

Anyway, these are just a couple minor suggestions.  I look forward to reading more from you!

It's really funny... I just finished critiquing another piece of work and I told them that they really should work on showing more than telling. 

Now I come across your WONDERFUL piece and I realize... there must be a balance. 

I saw in your description that you don't really know what your poem means.  Thats actually pretty cool that you can generate such a gem without really getting at the core.  Depending on what kind of poet you want to be; whether you'd like to be inspired and write beautiful words with hollow meanings, or whether you want to have poetry laden with meaning and inner conflict.  I think you've really got something here! 

Hearing this line ,

A soft melody hums in our ears, We long to know its origin, It plays and wipes away our fears, It tells us we will never win

remind me of my first time hearing "Do You Realize" by The Postal Service.  Although the melody is soothing the words are so sad and kind of scary.  Did you have a song in mind when you were writing this?

One other thing to solidify the relationship between you and this other person/people you are with.  This really speaks to me about the way you feel about music.  Personifying music with related verbs such as humming and playing...genius

It seems as though we definitely feel the same way about music.

Entranced by sounds so strange and grim, Our minds melt under the pressure

I sometimes feel the same way about music.  I love being lost in the melodies and sounds.  Reading this really triggers those feelings.

I love the work.  Maybe you can link your relationship with this other person, music, and the music's affect on the relationship. 

Lastly i must applaud you for the wonderful line,

Phases of emotional metamorphosis

really speaks to how much you value music and the emotional toll it sets on you.

Keep up the fantastic work!  best of luck