Honestly, idk if it was me either, but I would say that exposition should ONLY reveal what is necessary and it's better if it's not revealed UNTIL it is necessary. That's not to say that you can't pull a Potter, and give a subplot that reveals something important to the main plot 5 books later, but tie-ins are different from an exposition dump. A good book is as much a strip-tease of your story as anything else. Take it slow.

Thanks for peeking at my work. Asterisks refer to italicized. Sorry for the confusion. Something I can do a quick search on and delete when necessary, but also keep the reader in the loop when I'm stuck with plain text.

Thanks for the great critique. Your comments were really helpful! I totally appreciate you taking the time to read it! Thank you!
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Saw your post on the "words fail me" thread. "Let the Right One In" you can find on DVD almost anywhere (it was a big arthouse hit last year). The book (a very Stephen King-ish read) can be ordered.

Opps. Clicked on the wrong name! Sorry!

Thanks for the critique/comment on "I know you" (originally called "Fiction?"
I made a few changes and hope it reads a little better for you.

NB I'm sorry about all that flack in the forum. I look forward to reading more of your work.

Hi there. Just letting everyone who critiqued my story "Mistakes Bite" know that it was accepted for publication in the Creatures of the Night anthology being published on October 31st from Absolute Xpress publishing. Thanks for the critique.

Whilst the topic of religion is extremely fascinating, it may be wise to keep it off the forums. it has resulted in some nasty arguments before, that became far less than civil. i would be more than happy to talk with you about religion (I believe you and i would share many opinions) But i would prefer to do it off the forums.

Hi. Thanks for the critique of my story "Mistakes Bite". I will definitely take a look at the sentence structure closely before I send it off to the contest. Cheers.