I really liked your ideas, thank you. I meant to google the "younglings" thing to be sure it wasn't ONLY in Star Wars but I think I'll just take it out. As much as I love me some Star Wars, I don't want it popping up in my work!

I would love to see your flash if you have the karma to post it

I listen to this when I'm REALLY down. It's 'just' psychotic enough to crack me up. It is my gift to you:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CLlm5S80mE4

Honestly, idk if it was me either, but I would say that exposition should ONLY reveal what is necessary and it's better if it's not revealed UNTIL it is necessary. That's not to say that you can't pull a Potter, and give a subplot that reveals something important to the main plot 5 books later, but tie-ins are different from an exposition dump. A good book is as much a strip-tease of your story as anything else. Take it slow.

Thanks for peeking at my work. Asterisks refer to italicized. Sorry for the confusion. Something I can do a quick search on and delete when necessary, but also keep the reader in the loop when I'm stuck with plain text.

Thanks for the great critique. Your comments were really helpful! I totally appreciate you taking the time to read it! Thank you!
-m-

Saw your post on the "words fail me" thread. "Let the Right One In" you can find on DVD almost anywhere (it was a big arthouse hit last year). The book (a very Stephen King-ish read) can be ordered.

Opps. Clicked on the wrong name! Sorry!

Thanks for the critique/comment on "I know you" (originally called "Fiction?"
I made a few changes and hope it reads a little better for you.

NB I'm sorry about all that flack in the forum. I look forward to reading more of your work.