Eternity
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bleeding trees,
I feel
cold breeze of the air.
Leaves are falling from the trees
I am falling for you.
Catch me,
For I will love you
With all my heart.
Time may pass
my love for you won't change.
I will love you
until penguins learn how to fly;
until baboons turn into scientists;
until deer walk upright;
'Coz my love for you
Is for an eternity.
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Thanks for informing me on you having to write this fantastic piece. It reminds me of an average hiking trail with blustery winds in that lie ahead of me in the rocky hiking path. This was truly a poem (and sight!) to behold! NIcole Hayden, I hope to hear of you some time!
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Thanks for correcting me, I actually was thinking about that mistake... LOL
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Catch me,
For I will love you
With all my heart.
Time may pass
my love for you won't change.
This is my favourite stanza in this poem! I think this short, yet meaningful work of writing is just wonderful!
Kay Moore,
Thanks for the comment. I think the part that you said is a nice line but this is the part what I like the best
I will love you until penguins learn how to fly; until baboons turn into scientists; until deer walk upright; 'Coz my love for you Is for an eternity.
I like this line because it shows that my love for a certain person will never end because deer can't walk upright and stuff like that...
Thanks again!
Hey nice piece. I like your unconventional measuring stick for how long your love will last:
That was a nice surprise and fun to read. However, one quick editorial: the plural of "deer" is still "deer"
Fun piece though.