Thanks for the crit paul, your comments were most welcome...Carol x

Hi, thought I'd scratch on yer pad to let you know that I've written and posted up the continuation of the Reuben and Brian story.

Thanks, Paul. That's what it's all about, right?
- Genevieve

Thanks for the critique of LWL Scene : Transformation! Maybe I've hooked you on Romance? ha ha.

Thank you for the Welcome!

Thanks for the critique Paul, nicely done. And yes, those are all important questions.As a child found biblical stories appalling and cruel. As this story expands, I'm hoping people *think* about what's wrong with many of these stories and make their choices based on humanist [regardless of religion] ethics. The best way, sometimes, to put point across is to explore that in story form.

Your welcome, Paul. No one had ever told me they'd take all my advice. Even if you don't, I'm gratefull for your trust in my critique.

CAS, COLOR OR CULTURE: Thank you for your crit. As for time frame of the story - " The world's top politician is black" (Obama) It seems most folks miss that - in fact no one has caught it yet! I found your crit the most helpful so far - appreciate your time and effort. It is baed on a true story - only a few weeks old. Thanks again.

Thanks for the befanningment!