Ugh, oh my good god! This really sent chills down my spine. You have a point that gelatin is not all that innocent and sweet, but made out of humans in truth. This was really scaring me, ha ha ha ha ha ha ha! This sorta reminds me of hot dogs, they are not made of meat always, but from animal scraps and remains. Maybe from this story, you could become a great horror novelist, just like Stephen King. Just Imagine!  Despite, that there is a vat of human gelatin, I still remember, that there is always room for jello, ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha hah ha!

From a vegetarian's point of view, this has a "see how it feels?!" message.  But I'm sure that's just me

Obviously this is just my little ol' opinion.

The tour guide mentions that there is human jello to be made, but I would have preferred if someone asked what the other 95% of the jello was, and someone made a joke about "Jello is made from people!" (à la Soylent Green), and then the guide's face was tight or unresponsive or something.  I don't think she'd want to incite panic by telling the truth!

If you wanted to keep the "Do you know how much gelatin a human body actually has?" dialogue, maybe the morbid conversation above (the "Soylent Green" joke or whatever) could continue, and the people on the tour actually ask the guide that question.  Maybe she only smiles brightly in response, or something. 

The second-person narration is a pet peeve of mine.  Even in the "Choose your Own Adventure" books, it drove me batty.  I kept thinking, "Who the hell is 'you'?"  And at the end, I thought, "Why are we talking to 'you' if 'you' is now lime-flavored and jiggling on someone's plate?"

If you do change to a third-person narration, you could describe one particularly innocent tour-goer, making the reader care about him/her before s/he goes on The Last Splash. 

There was only one grammar issue I saw:

"Why?" You ask the guard standing to your left.

The "you" shouldn't be capitalized.

A question about copyright: Can you use Jell-O in your story?  Would you have to say "gelatin"?  I dunno how this works.

I love this concept!  The short sentences work for this piece.  I like that the style of narration isn't creepy--nothing about "it was a dark and stormy night" or "their spines tingled" or too-short or too-long sentences--but the story is definitely creepy. It makes for a disconcerting contrast that works for a disconcerting topic!

 You know, it wasn't until about Thanksgiving time of last year that I found out what was actually in Jell-O, but now that I've read this... I really enjoyed it. I like how it's so short--I think that lengthening it would probably have lessened the effect it has on the reader. I also love how the tour guide smiles the entire time. It was so funny! I'm curious as to what the pink triangle meant and what its significance is to the story, but it could be something completely obvious and I just missed it. Either way, great short-short story--loved it. Aside from the "you" thing that Quixotic mentions, I found just one grammatical error:

You and everyone reculantly cooperates.

I think it should just be "cooperate" instead of "cooperates" because after all, it's the entire group of people doing one thing. You could say "You cooperate" or "everyone else cooperates", but I think when you combine "you" and "everyone", the word "cooperate" shouldn't be pluralized.

 Hey good idea ill read anything with cannibalism in it (if you knew you would know why). The one thing I found was that I didn’t really read any emotions off the main character; maybe it’s the way the second person narrative worked for this story but I didn’t feel anything towards the character, so when they started to die it was like it sucks not oh no someone help them. That is all. I know its flash fiction so you try to show a slice of the whole not the whole itself; so you have to compromise charectization but nonetheless I think this is a fine slice of fiction.

This was such an amazing piece!  Starting out completely innocent with the most boring trip one might imagine, and suddenly turning surprisingly dark and enthralling with that one simple question asked by the tour guide.  Plot having been noted, might I add that it was expertly presented.  The point of view was excellent, and really added a lot.

That being said, there are a couple of things to be addressed (nothing really over-arching, just detail stuff).  Where you say

Inside, everyone is suddenly faced by masked men with army-issue guns. "Take off all of your clothes," they shout, prodding startled people with their guns.

the "guns" sounds redundant to the reader.  If there was some way you could get the same point across without using the word "guns" again so soon, it would read much smoother.

Just a bit later in that same paragraph you say

Now naked - and now you know what that sexy babe looks like

This reads awkwardly as well, because it feels like either the "Now naked" should be changed to "You are now naked," or the "And now you know what" should be changed to "and now knowing what." Later in that same sentence (sorry I'm picking apart this one paragraph so much) you talk about walking into the next room

where you can hear zaps and horrified screams but not the cause.

would you really be able to hear the cause, or is it a visual thing?  In order to make it read better hear, you might try saying that you can hear zaps and screams but cannot see the cause. 

You suddenly notice a pink triangle on the guard's collar.

Is there some significance in this that I'm missing?  You point this out, but give no further explanation, which stumped me for a moment.  Is there some reference here that I'm not getting?

Hopefully you will find these critiques helpful, and please keep writing!  I look forward to reading more from where this came from!

 HI Phed:

What a wonderful story.  I think the tiny boo-boos have been pointed out and there is no need to revisit.

I was tickled with this.  You have raised suspicion on a few levels for me.  I knew years ago what Jello consisted of -  funny it is a preferred feeding for hospital and nursing home patients..  You show the need to be an informed consumer..

I think I was ingtrigued with something, and I wondered if it were intentional on your part.  You mention army-issued guns.  Is this a clever way to tie the government and the FDA to the lobbyists and back-room dealings that make our politicians rich?  It serves the purpose to keep us from trusting that the FDA always gets it right.. cuz it doesn't. 

I was glad to see the clarification of the pink triangle.. The only thing I could think of was that it was a symbol for strawberry or flavor of gelatin,,, I was really reaching, I know, but I had never heard of that in the gay community.  I think the rainbow would be a better icon if you are trying to draw attention to this aspect of the story.  Still, I am wondering if you mean to draw attention to that, as it would be like making a claim for argument that gays would do type of thing, or maybe that Jello is a preferred food of gays.  ????   Anyway, it would open a debate that might draw attention from the Climax of the story.

I think it is lawful to mention a trade name in a writing.  After all, once it is common household name, it is considerd public domain... I think.  If you say that you went to McDonalds for lunch or used some other name like a sports team, it would still be based on the same law.  You will only get in trouble if you state something about one of these people that could damage their reputation without a back up.  Of course this story is not exactly flattering to Jello.  I think it is allowed in a fiction story though, but not if written as an expos'e. 

Anyway,,, I loved it... YOu have such a great imagination.  I hope one day we could colaberate on a fiction story about the Deaf...    Wink and a nod... Jeanie

 On my honor, I will never again eat jello or use gelatin powder to make a fruit salad again.  I learned my lesson.

The concentration camps and Nazi gas chambers flashed through my mind.  

This story is just great.  You have a wonderful imagination!

xvermonter