I love reading slices of life - they are real.  There is no pretending, no artifice.  Generally speaking, there are also not a lot of superfluous words and wording - yours held true in each of these.  It is good that you acquainted or reminded the audience that Deaf means culture and deaf means condition. 

 I'm Deaf, and proud of it.  The capitalized "D" isn't a mistype - it's an indication of my cultural pride in being Deaf.  Just "deaf" is an indication of a medical condition, without the cultural association.

It does make a huge impact on the understanding of the story.  I worked with a blind woman and a blind teenager.  In each case, the modifications they used to integrate themselves into the whole of society were starkly different from what sighted people used.  Just their Braille books alone are so cumbersome!  A single textbook for a sighted student would be made into several, thick volumes for the blind one. 

You could enlarge on the theme of your sighted husband adjusting to life with a deaf wife.  There are many little adjustments which would be needed.  It might add to the story's impact.

As it is, I keep thinking that I wanted a little more.  The story seems to end without "punch".

"That was your alarm??? I thought there was an earthquake, I was looking outside for cops or an helicopter or something..."

I had to laugh at my poor startled husband as he staggered back to bed, almost hyperventiliating.  Now he's used to the alarm clock and doesn't even budge when it goes off.

You seem to be heading in the right direction but then it ends with the

Now he's used to the alarm clock and doesn't even budge when it goes off.

Perhaps you could re-word it to make the ending stand out.  But it was a cute story.  I have been writing a lot of memoir pieces too.  It isn't the easiest thing to do when you are trying to translate the vision in your head to the words on your paper.  It can drive you crazy trying to find just the right place or words to end.  Good luck!

 I really enjoyed this! I agree with Debbie that I would like to read more about the relationship between you and your husband, although this little chunk certainly stands well enough on its own though. Fun!

This story lacked "umph." It really wasn't realistic. Your narrator's voice was real, but you needed more. The detail was sparse. If you're deaf, how can you hear your husband speak? I know you use sign-language, but you have to state so in the story, otherwise readers will be confused. It was rather funny in a small-scale sense; but that humor was overshadowed by minor grammatical errors and lack-of-depth. You need more. Not that this wasn't good; you just need to add a few more minor details, like sign-language, perhaps explaining what the alarm clock looks like: I understand the metaphor of the earthquake, but you over-exaggerated it. Other than what I have stated, you did a fairly decent job. Keep up the good work, keep writing. Also, I wouldn't consider this "fiction." More like non-fiction, unless you based this on an actual event, in which case, you'd have to state "Based Upon a True Story." Good luck.

I like this. I like the way you started it, and the way it’s written. The way it's written compliments the fact that it’s a true story, because it’s like you’re telling a story to a friend. I really like the way it’s written until

“…the following week we were sleeping for work…”

I think it’s the “sleeping for work” in particular that doesn’t read right to me.  I think you should rephrase or reword it. I think that’s really the only criticism I have for this piece, because I like the rest of it.

I like how short and simple it is, and I like how you ended it. I like the title too, because it’s an alarm of more than one kind: there’s the alarm clock, then there’s Marv’s reaction to the alarm clock, and your reaction to his reaction. That’s a hell of a way to wake up as a newlywed. I look forward to reading more of your work. Cute story

Hey, my name is Alexis.

I really like the style of your narritive. Its really cute. I think that the explanation at the beginning is pointless and not needed.

We wake up - and I see my poor husband literally flying out of the bed and the door, and I sit there, amazed.

I think you should change it to, "We wake up. I see my poor husband literally flying out of the bed and straight to the door, but I sit there amazed."

"What the hell was THAT???"  Marv yelled as he raced back in the room, wild-eyed.

Also the all caps and excess of question marks isn't needed. We know that Marv is yelling because you later on said, "Marv yelled as he raced back int he room, wild-eyed."

Overall, I really liked your story. It was cute and funny.

-Alexis