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On Writers blog., by Christobah: Well, uh, I don't love it. My notebook has as many self-doubting
rants scribbled in it as any other writer's does. An... » Read more...
On Rise Against, Chapter 1: 1-3, by Jim Kelley: I'll start with the line-by line notes during my first
read-through:
If I try to specify the punctuation errors in... » Read more...
On The Ravages of a Man, by Debbie Kerr: The details here are terrific. The setting is particularly
well-done; at all points this story feels like it's firmly in
... » Read more...
On HBS Version (Draft) 2, Chapter 1: Ch. 1 - The Senator, by SD Curran: I pretty much agree with Santini's critique. My primary reaction
to this is a great big "why" and no enthusiasm at all fo... » Read more...
On The Tortoise and the Hare, by Brock Reynolds: This piece starts out really well but comes unraveled at the
end. The beginning does a great job of establishing the characte... » Read more...
On The Cafe', by Dylan Moody: Let's start line-by-line:
cool breeze through thinned hair
Too many adjectives too close together. I'd cut 'coo... » Read more...