Wow. You didn't waste any time getting to the plot did you? Since this is a work in progress I'm not going to give you too much to worry about. All I would change is this...

What more could a girl want?

After that question I believe you should start a new paragraph, just because it seems to be veering off into a new subject. Maybe you should write a little more before you get to the darker edges too, or perhaps make it a bit more cryptic and open for the readers mind. Just an idea. I'll keep an eye out for the rest of it.

I enjoy the conciseness of this work.  It gives it power and keeps your head spinning.  With that said, I think there are a few things that could strengthen it even more.

The first line, I think, needs to be super strong.  This might be a time when showing is better than outright saying.  It seems keeping things short is important in this piece, which is all the more reason to really strengthen each line.  How do we know the girl is lonely?  What made it a happier time?  Perhaps a reference to her father could take the story full circle?

i would also recommend going through each line and seeing what lines or words can be cut and what lines or phrases can be combined. 

She had love, security, and wealth. What more could a girl want? Then it was ripped from her

The above lines, for example.  If the question was cut, it would take away that momentary pause and make the next line hit even harder. 

changed the instance

"Instance" should be "instant."

didn’t even enter his pedophile mind.

I don't think this is necessary.  We know he's a pedophile without saying it. 

For a title, maybe call this "Daddy's Little Girl"?

If you like really short stories that are truly powerful read some works by Amy Hempel.  She is the master of crafting together amazing sentences and packing as much information she can in a single sentence. 

This was a powerful, quick read.  Good job!

 Hey just checking this one out. I am about to go and read part 2. The only thing i have to say is...Slow down! You want to ease your reader in to this deep topic than.....WAM! When I read this all I saw was an out line(not shure thats what you were ameing for) Thats great, because then you can just go on in and play with it. twist it and see how many different ways you could get the same feeling in to more or even less words. Great Job!

 Wow, that was very powerful, but too abrupt. I think you jumped way to fast throughtout the whole peice. Maybe slow it down, add a bit more detail, not to much about what the father is doing, but maybe how much she was happy and loved life? Then her emotions a bit deeper later on.

 A short fiction 'From the mind of me...' has a story and it flows well. But if the paragraphs were included in the script, it would have been better to read. There is 's' missing in Daddy' s girl, a third line from the top.

The title 'Daddy's Girl' could be more suitable. First two sentences are the same and repeated in such a short story. Once was enough, by repeating it doesn't makes a point or a statement.

The abuse is displayed as a routine act here and in a casual way. It should have used more emotions and little stronger language for the real impact on the reqader. Sometimes an exaggeration is an impressive tool in writing.

It's good read and can be better with some work on it.

Thank you for sharing it.

Jaya H.