On Ancient Glow, by Royce Utley: Thanks for tearing this to pieces guys! This is my first attempt at a short story so I definitely needed this kind of in dept... » Read more...

On Ancient Glow, by Royce Utley: I'm particularly worried about the ending of this story, it just wraps up. What do you think? Also do you think I could e... » Read more...

On Sapphire Bright, by N.I. London: I think you are going to need to totally reformat this piece if you want any body to read it and critique it. In it's cur... » Read more...

On When Being a Vampire Doesn't Suck, by T.G.Santini: Ahahah, I found this to be a really light hearted little story. It really did make me chuckle a few times. "Like the boiler ... » Read more...

On My favorite meal I can remember., by Royce Utley: Originally there was no footnote, but I decided to put it in since this is an imitation of David Foster Wallace who uses some... » Read more...

On Cold Sun, by Royce Utley: I meant to say cold sun, it's a contradiction of what we know the sun to be. It is always warm, but on that day it wasn&#... » Read more...

On Fast and Loose, Chapter 1: One, by MikePB: Oh, I see Brock commented on your dialogue, just ignore my input on it then! ... » Read more...

On Fast and Loose, Chapter 1: One, by MikePB: This is a pretty cool idea, you should really flesh it out more. I really think you should write a REAL beginning to this pie... » Read more...

On Love and Life, Chapter 2: The End of this Love, by LaurenB45: Overall this poem is pretty good, but about halfway through it starts to lose structure and you really lost me on it. My hea... » Read more...